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Sophie Hall

Email: hallj561@aol.com

Homepage: www.myspace.com/mynameisdracula

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Last blog entry: Wed, 18 Aug 2010 02:13:26 am

Profile updated: Sun, 16 May 2010 01:53:39 am

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Biography

If I was truely proficient all this would be written in the third person. But Sophie Hall the poet doesn't like that much.

I like poetry very much. It's nice and poemmy and rhymes. Writeoutloud are so lovely to me, and really encourage new young poets like me!
I've won a poetry slam and been named their Poem of the month since I joined.

I have performed in London, Manchester, Bolton and Hebden Bridge thus far and started performing when I was 19 years old. Now I'm 107.

My poetry myspace is here:
www.myspace.com/pleonasticfantastic

http://sophsgotwords.blogspot.com/ - is my blog. Full of words, and mumblings, and moanings, and even has a Haiku of the day feature! Isn't that worth telling all your friends about? Yes it is. Don't lie.

Hope to see you all soon. I'll smile vaguely and laugh nervously and pretend to be interesting. But now you know it's all vicious lies.

Samples

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Orange

This is an orange.
And how - storange it is.
It's curdling with juices
And it's used on cabooses.
How storange it is.
It's brimming to the edge
With zesty sweet sap
And I'm cutting a wedge
For my teeth to entrap
This is an orange.
And I bought it from Norwich.
How Storange is that?
This is an orange
That got caught in a door hinge
This is an orange
That I must say has more tinge
Of a reddish burnt sienna than orange.
How storange is that?

****

Welcome to Youtube.com!
Click here to make your own personal account!
On Youtube.com!
Click here to upload a ridiculous amount
On Youtube.com!
Of videos of you doing things of worth!
At Youtube.com!
Or perhaps you’d just perfer to surf
At Youtube.com!
Our extensive repertoire of 10 minute wonders
Our brilliant selection tearing you asunder
Anyone can upload, anyone can cop a load
Of this and that and some of those
At Youtube.com!

Look! It’s an ugly lady singing like a pretty lady!
Five star rating! Maybe leave a comment
“That videos a little bit shady
And the sounds out of sync, love Tom, Kent

Not to worry! Just dislike his comment!
Little thumbs down button, click, I win!
That’s what you get - Tom comma Kent!
Now watch my 4 year old play the violin!

Two star rating! Look! It’s a cat playing a keyboard!
Much better combination of cute things playing music
Five star rating! No! Four! Three! BORED.
At 1 minute 4 watch my drunk friend be sick!

Ha ha ha…that is very amusing to me.
Four star rating! Look it’s that gig I went to last night
Complete with shaky camera and awful quality
But that‘s the BACK OF MY HEAD, so that deserves the right

For a five star rating!
At Youtube.com!
Who’s next for a slating?
At Youtube.com
Look! That man is half tree!
At Youtube.com
Quantity over quality
At Youtube.com
Watch that man fall over!
Listen to Champagne Supernova
Swoon over Maria Shapalova
See me and my friend in Maldova!
At Youtube.com

Subscribe to my video channel! “Okay!”
Swear to it! Sign it in blood!
I don’t care if your arms’ pleading Homo Fuge
To my recollection you PROMISED you would!

One star rating. Oh that is very rich
Just because I left you a nasty comment
You thought you’d act like a complete bitch!
I’m unsubscribing to you Tom from Kent!
I think I’m going to go outside…
NO! Youtube.com demands you stay
Watch videos of ’outside’ inside!
Homo fuge! Homo fuge!

Do not leave your computer screen
Do not heave your entire being
Look at all the things you haven’t seen
Look at all the things you should be seeing!

At Youtube.com!
Watch Suddam Hussein DIE
At Youtube.com
Watch a man bake a pie!
At Youtube.com
Watch an episode of Dallas
At Youtube.com
Comment it with malice!
At Youtube.com
Do not sign out, no - not yet
Pledge allegiance to the internet
Look at the dog play bass clarinet!
Watch Christopher Walken play Russian Roulette
It’s all here! It’s all on!
It’s all free, it’s not a con
LOOK AT OLIVIA NEWTON JOHN
On
On
On
YOUTUBE.Com

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Music of the Spheres

You know I hate to say ‘goodnight’
But yet I do with great consistence
The day is gone, I’ve lost the fight
And you’re dissolving in the distance

And so I lie as my eyes close
And drift to twisted reverie
Obligatory picture shows
Of things I do not want to see

So when we say tonight’s goodbye
And our dreams transport us elsewhere
Follow these directions and I
Promise that I’ll meet you there

Catch the last train to Unconscious
Pop the last gray matter bubble
Take my hand and let it launch us
Into Edwin Hubble’s stubble

Don’t question it, get going! Fly
Fly, fly your mind’s invented rocket
Straight into the full moon’s eye
Close the door on Earth, then lock it

Let your eyelids flicker dear,
Blow that star out, over there
Let’s rearrange the atmosphere
And hear the music of the spheres

We’re sleeping in our empty beds
But dreaming under the same sky
We’re together in our heads
Don’t question it. Get going, fly.

So remember when you miss me
And your losing all cognition
Just let your mind break itself free
And take me on a new space mission

I know I’m not right next to you
But yet we’re flying through the air
We’re gliding through the endless blue
We always are, when I’m not there.

****

Tragic Trick

I’m a little magician with my little box of tricks
I’ve got some coloured tied up scarves, and some juggling sticks
A plastic wand I picked up for just two pounds ninety nine
A jaunty top hat passers by have said looks mighty fine

So I’ve got the look tied down, I’m sure you’ll all agree
I look like a bit of a twat, to put it simply
I can only assume that is good for my career
I guess if it goes down the pan I’ll just make it disappear

I’ve read so many magic books, Even kidnapped a dove
I’ve got to grips with Derren Brown, and bought some long black gloves
I cut out some paper stars, stuck to my shirt with tape
And then found out that curtains make a really fetching cape

My new ensemble turned heads, especially in the playground
The head of course, usually mine, as the kids knock it around
I never knew that blood could come from out of my own ear
Maybe I’ll put that in my show, it’s bound to get a cheer

At the moment, I’m on the search for a glamorous assistant
Some of the girls down at the park so far have been resistant
I’m not entirely sure as to why they’re being so modest
After all - there’s magic - then there’s a girl in a gold bodice…

I didn’t get into this business to score with loads of chicks
But when I get to tie them up, I’ll admit I get kicks.
I don’t exactly know why, but Mummy says its okay
I’ll understand when I’m older, well - I really couldn’t say

But I’ve no time to worry about potential romances
My life is my career now, cause I’ll get no second chances
The stage is all set up, and I’ll admit I’m getting tense
I’m a little magician, and they’re my big audience

I’ve got to stick it out though! I’ve got to make my mark!
But now I’m really nervous, good job that these pants are dark…
I walk on to the platform, my knees positively shaking
Good thing my arms aren’t, as I juggle - and there’s no mistaking

That the audience are clapping, and I’m a total hit
Just wait ’til they see ‘the sawing girls in half bit!’
Which might I add goes brilliantly, the audience are silenced
I guess I should’ve warned them that my magic show is violent

‘Behold! The girl is cut in half!’ I announce, my face beaming
It’s just the same as on TV, except without the screaming!
It’s okay though, ‘cause I know, they just edit it out
One day, I’ll get that luxury too, that’s what its all about

I then slot back the bloody box, the audience disbelieving
Remove the lid in triumph, ’til I notice she’s not breathing
“But I don’t understand!” I murmur, the crowd silent as ever
“When I see them do it on TV, the girls slot back together!”

The audience disperses, all fingers thrice hit nine,
Coupled with my mums’ insistence that “it’s fine, it’s fine, it’s fine!”
I notice lots of cars pull up, I figure they’re my fans
I take off the bloody gloves, and get ready to shake some hands

A man in blue approaches me, and takes me by the arm
My mother begging him I never meant anyone harm
“Shut up mum, I’m famous now!” I say, face turning red
But in replace of the man’s grip, were handcuffs now instead

“Wow I’m very flattered” I gasp, clasped in metal
“A private showing just for you? Well sir - then it is settled”
My fan looks most confused, as I contort my arms in shapes
Escaping from the cuffs jubilant, as the gent just gapes.

“I’ve been practising that one for years!” I proudly declare.
God, he looked dead impressed, that’s one hell of a stare.
The next thing I know, I’m in his car, dare I say by magic
“Son, the only word used to describe that trick is ‘tragic.’”

“I think the word is ‘magic’, sir” I gently intervene
“Unless you were removing the biggest splinter seen…
We could begin to understand, and maybe just respect the
Completely mind boggling reason why you would dissect her.”

I am a little magician with a little box of tricks
But for reasons I can’t state, they took away my sticks
In fact I’m not permitted to say much more than I ought,
‘Cause I might have to rely on this poem later when I am in court.

****

How to say 'I love you too.'

“I love you.” - I know, me too
But not all the time like you do
I know we’re too far from each other
And yet I’m technically your lover
But please don’t call me by ‘sweetheart’
I know we’re miles and miles apart
But don’t woo me with clichéd art
Don’t take me on a horse and cart
My organs aren’t confectionary
Why not look in a dictionary?
Don’t take my hand and smile like that
Don’t stroke my hair, I’m not a cat
A twat perhaps, starting a spat
But not a saccharine kitty cat
I’m not a saccharine kitty cat
I just don’t need that pity pat
Don’t talk to me like lovers do
Annie Lennox hadn’t a clue
We are no longer star-crossed teens
We’re not Sonnet number eighteen
Stop adding sugar to the tea
You know it’s far too sweet for me
You know too much will rot my teeth
You know I love you underneath
The numerous layers of plaque
You’d see that if you scraped it back
But this is love, not dentistry,
Don’t push, or I’ll resent it, see?
You don’t have to love me like this
Don’t cling to me, you’re not a cyst
You’re forcing momentary bliss
You’re puncturing it with every kiss
I really need you to stop this
You think you’re hitting when you miss
I’m not a saccharine kitty cat,
I’m just trying to tell you that -
I’m just trying to tell you that -
I think I love you too.

****

Social Services

The other day something incredibly exciting played out in a sequence of events
There was an obstruction to the narrative, and then some sort of consequence.
This will be the anecdote of an absolute lifetime.
You’ll fall off your chairs, you’ll greet me with stares - and you’ll all laugh at the same time

And one day at a party, I’ll be typically hanging about near a hastily assembled buffet…
And one of you will cry out ‘You’ll never guess what happened to her the other day!’
Oh and I will smile, in a shy sort of way
While on the inside grinning inanely that I actually have something interesting to say…

People will look up, and begin to gather round
Someone will turn the music down, to enjoy this far more exciting sound
The sound of a girl with a slightly interesting narration.
One that is about to undertake it’s damn exciting formulation

So with a chuckle and a ‘Oh you’ll never guess the day I had..’
Which I have chosen to be the phrase to act as the perfect anecdote launching pad.
Oh and - I make no confession that perhaps I’m being a tad gregarious
All that matters at this moment is that they find me totally- fucking - hilarious.

And off I go. The story runs leisurely off my tongue at such a perfect pace
As I finally find a connection to my fellow human race
The magnum opus of hilarious party stories, will finally take place
The final frontier of social banter, my moment of communal grace

The opener goes perfectly. The setting and characters well introduced
The ‘comic obstruction’ is well observed, and humorously deduced
The amused looks on all their faces - oh they’re all so interested in me
The perfect social premise is here - a witty commentary

This is brilliant…No longer will I be the one who is so uptight
Who finds themselves a nice corner to sit in, and remains there for most of the night
Eating all the Twiglets, digesting all the out of date Pringles
Too nauseated to chat to the couples, yet still not cool enough to sit with the singles

But now I have an anecdote. My chalice of societal success.
My chance to finally make it, and to really impress!
People with mainstream Little Britain-esque senses of humour
That they all quote to each other endlessly until Ive fully developed a brain tumour…

And I’ll get to be involved in popular culture discussions! Such as the latest brand of iPod…
Or the Ithis or the Ithat…Isore, Icorn on the cob..
And I’ll get to find out who exactly got off with whom,
At exactly what time, in exactly what room…
And have actual human beings phone numbers added to my phone
Sacrificing playing Snake 3 in exchange to listening to them all drone
And we’ll play spin the bottle…and we’ll all get decidedly nude
And I’ll get to end sentences with ‘That’s totally rad, dude!’
And I’ll get to be just like the cast of Friends
Everyday will have a new punch line, or some sort of humorous end
And I’ll bask in the glory of all my new pals
Whos voices will inevitably at some point begin to gouge into the roots of my ear canals

Then I realise… as I reach the punch line to the story to end all..
This would be the social equivalent of smashing my head against a wall
So as the crowd lean closer, and the closing punch line beckons
I see my existence about to be punctured by these morons…in the matter of a few short seconds

And with only the final few words of my anecdote locked firmly in my head
I take a deep breath - and stop my words dead.

The crowd looks bemused, well of course wouldn’t you?
Ive come all this way - I hardly thought Id make it through
And the finishing line is now mere millimetres away
But I’ll stop right here. It’s the easiest way

32 eyes followed me across the various rooms
Except for some ‘whos’ getting off with some ‘whoms’
I slam the door behind me and run back to sanity
In the wake of my unfinished story profanity

It had been so perfect. Too perfect...some might say
But it would’ve been foolish to have given that baby away
And so for now, I zip up my lips
Pack up my tongue, undo my anecdotes script

To think Id almost wasted such a gem on such fools
Who gift wrap everyone of their utterances in drool
The people need these stories to relieve the dreaded awkward silence
Or else just mindlessly resort to deadheaded violence
But remember that what may just seem pretty good on the surface
Is actually delivering the perfect social service.

All poems are copyright of the originating author. Permission must be obtained before using or performing others' poems.

Last blog entry

You

Posted on Monday 16th August 2010 8:53 pm

Dedicated to you. It was always you, darlings.

My attempt to be poetic

Involves being aesthetically

Magnetic, like kinetic energy.

Using metre to perfection

Involves inputting exceptional

Inflections into witty commentary

My attempt to impress you lot

Who all think that Harry Potter's

Got an awful lot ot offer more than me

Will at times fall into trouble

But my love for you is bubbling

To double what it was previously

As a poet - it's my duty

To deliver to you beautiful

And fruity words so listen carefully

These moments we are sharing now

Are timeless and will no doubt tower

Through thousands of now pointless memories

Well let's face it, I am flummoxed

And am having trouble stomaching

My dumb luck when you first looked up at me

In fact it's just implausible

That you exist or your applause is

Audible at all - extraordinary

You're brimming with intelligence

You're relevant and elegantly

Decadent - and well - that's nice for me

You - with your little funny heads

You - with oleaginous beauty spreading

Far ahead of my dishonesty

May I squeeze your collective cheek

And waggle lobes 'til my knees weaken

And I'm meek with inferiority

You with your sparkling wit

That dangles across your pretty

Mouths oft hits me with a harsh anxiety

You with your pert figures

That in turn make my giggles

Linger as you wiggle your posteriors at me

Some would say that's inappropriate

Behaviour for a poetry lot

But for me - it's so so necessary.

You - with your weird ears

That some would call endearing

But my dear - they just look a bit silly

You with your increasingly angry brow

That makes your eyes tower

Over countless levels of my dignity

You who haven't returned my calls

In 3 weeks - with galling

Excuses that cause such embarrassment with BT

You with - decrepit beauty

That you torture me with beautifully

Hot booty that exists to tempt me

But despite it all I love you

And I know you would be clueless

If you ever were without my poetry

So I'll stay up here forever

Reciting exciting and clever

Verse for you until the end of eternity

Because without you - I'm just a sad

Act, stood up here with scribble pad

So for that I'm glad that you are you

So I guess I'll just be me.

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Rachel Pantechnicon

Wed 25th Aug 2010 12:25

Hello Sophie

Well, especially for you. That's cleaned me out now, though - I only have six poems. Enjoy your stale cake.

R

Isobel

Mon 16th Aug 2010 17:09

Aww thanks for that Sophie. Was really sorry we never got chance to chat. I was on such a high that night and there were so many people there. I was sorry you didn't get to read more - had you been drawn against me first round you might well have. You should try to make one of the regular Tudor nights - there's one on 9th September. It would be good to see you again - and next time I probably won't be with my entire family LOL xx

Francine

Thu 12th Aug 2010 17:44

Thank you, Sophie, it was lovely meeting you too!
What a thrill it was to witness such a fantastic Slam, where everyone performed so amazingly well, and the ambiance was superb!

xxxxx

meriel malone

Thu 10th Jun 2010 23:39

see, I eventually managed to get a new email address and join, hope you are doing fab ,ooo: what does this button do?..........

Joshua Coates

Sun 16th May 2010 01:09

Hey Sophie
Im copying you and got a page, aren't i a rebel

Robin J White

Thu 8th Apr 2010 18:48

Thank you very much ^_^

I'm a student in Aberystwyth, right on the sunny West Coast of Wales.

How about you?

X

Robin J White

Thu 8th Apr 2010 14:04

Hey Sophie, loving the poetry on here, it's a little bit different and a little bit lovely. Whether or not it was intended, Youtube had me chuckling into my mid morning (half one in the afternoon) cereal and I've read the rest with interest. Great stuff ^_^

Rob

Janet Ramsden

Sat 3rd Apr 2010 14:53

Hi Sophie,
Congratulations on one of your poems being chosen for Poem of the Month in features magazine.

I haven't entered the Wigan slam but will be there, most likely adding up the scores and/or in charge of the horn so don't you dare make me blast you off the stage by going over your allotted time slot :-)

Jx

Fassbinder

Wed 2nd Dec 2009 00:57

Hope so Sophie. I'll keep an eye out for Neal.

Fassbinder

Wed 2nd Dec 2009 00:35

In answer to your Q's. Anywhere that'll have me but in fairness, don't generally 'perform' that often. I supported John Hegley this time last year.

No, I haven't no.

Fassbinder

Tue 1st Dec 2009 23:53

Good evening Sophie

I have just enjoyed your Orange greatly. Storange created a significant ripple and I can assure you I am not a laugher.

I shall scroll down now and read more as I see, comparatively, you've written tonnes.

Joseph

Oh and thank you for introducing Youtube to me. I'm sure I know who "Tom from Kent" is! I think he has a Myspace account also.

Daniel Bresnahan

Mon 26th Oct 2009 19:10

Really liked the poem about YouTube.
Some nice parts and humour in it.

Keep it up.

Janet

Fri 23rd Oct 2009 15:32

Hi Sophie, thanks for your comment.
I'll be off-line for a while so just want to wish you well with your poetry and keep up the gigs when you can. :-)
Might see you at an event,
Janet.x

Julia Deakin

Thu 22nd Oct 2009 13:34

Sophie, finally got round to checking my page on this after months, and see your kind comment. Glad you liked L2K.
I've read your poems and can hear someone who really loves words and writing. Orange is my favourite. Perhaps see you at Puzzle on 2nd or Heb sometime.
:) Julia

Tommy Carroll

Tue 20th Oct 2009 12:40

Sophie, never be 'in' the third person.
Yours
Delightfuly
Ist personage

Tommy Carroll

Thu 8th Oct 2009 22:37

19....!
Jeezuzz!
Some future...
and it IS here and now.

Nicola Beckett

Sun 27th Sep 2009 18:34

I like your poetry and think its probably brill heard live. I especially like - Music of the Spheres - I like the way you cleverly worked the rhyme. Keep writing and good luck for future competitions x x Nic

Tomás Ó Cárthaigh

Fri 11th Sep 2009 11:03

Storange... is that a real word? I read there is no word that rhymes with orange... loved the poem though!!!

Rachel Pantechnicon

Thu 27th Aug 2009 11:21

Mr John Hegley is the living proof that there's a thin line between a good rhyme and a bad one. Much of it, I suspect, is in the rendition.

I will let you know next time I am up your way - have read at Manchester, Bolton, Wigan & Preston in the past, and always enjoy it up there. I never know which outfit to wear until I see the venue - it's so important for clothing and atmosphere to coincide. So I am seldom able to travel light.

Anyway, speak soon

Rachel P

steve black

Wed 26th Aug 2009 20:28

There is an Ogden Nash quality to your rhyming schemes, very good.

Rachel Pantechnicon

Wed 26th Aug 2009 17:29

Aha

I thought it was probably you, but wasn't 100% sure. Delighted to see from your own samples that you are into some gloriously askance rhyming.

Best wishes

R

Rachel Pantechnicon

Wed 26th Aug 2009 11:22

Dear Sophie

Thanks for your kind comment on my Poem Of The Month poem. Good luck with your search for a fridge.

Best wishes

Rachel P

Christine Dawson

Tue 18th Aug 2009 17:55

Thanks Sophie, for reading and commenting on 'Scrabble Online'. Sadly - I am an addict!
Cx

Joe Hakim

Thu 13th Aug 2009 21:24

Thanks Sophie. Last year I applied for the new voices section at the Poetry Arena by sending Luke Wright an MP3 of one of my poems, and then I was invited back this year by Luke to do a couple of full sets.

Bethan Townsend

Wed 12th Aug 2009 01:37

Well hello there :)

Yes I've been floating about round here awhile, if not active then...stalking heh x

Tommy Carroll

Sun 9th Aug 2009 23:56

all the way down here to say ... Sophie thanks for the comments.

Tommy

Isobel

Sun 2nd Aug 2009 08:45

Thanks for you comment on 'Cramping...' - that one holds such painful memories now! I stuffed it up really badly in Wigan. The middle page went missing and my mind went blank. Have you ever had to go from the intro to the end with no middle in front of a live audience? Not an experience I'd recommend - tee hee - glad you weren't there to hear it - I think you were on in Hebden - hope it went better for you.
Isobel x

Thomas Topping

Thu 23rd Jul 2009 21:14

Do you like my HUMBERT HUMBERT poem?
Wanted to know what you thought.

I making a Pot-Noodle, do you like them?

Thomas Topping

Thu 23rd Jul 2009 20:35

I don't really do anything, at the moment. I have swine flu, believe it or not.

I'm studying Combined English at the OU
What do you do, my dear?

Thomas Topping

Tue 21st Jul 2009 22:56

I've finished watching, "The Wrestler".

We can talk now, if you like?
I'll show you mine if you show me yours. Love to see what you have.

I'll comment on a couple of yours and you comment on mind?
Which ones you want me to look at?

Hannah Eve

Tue 21st Jul 2009 21:07

hi sophie sorry I haven't replied in about a year....oops so sorry I have been a little re-miss doing my final year etc. Thank you for the comment I enjoyed your writing too, very amusing! I love you too and the blog were especially funny. Good luck with everything, and yes definitely do the creative writing dissertation, (just make sure you abuse the appointment/tutorials)...I didn't .... but still got a 1st so it worked out ok in the end!!! xxxx

Thomas Topping

Mon 20th Jul 2009 23:18

You pretend to be interesting very well, I was totally fooled. Well, if your admission is that you are not really, you have coverered it well. If only I left the house, I may find out about you in person. Alas...

Isobel

Thu 16th Jul 2009 06:26

Hi Sophie - can't quite remember what your old profile was like but I like your new one - very dry and funny. Don't knock the use of 'I' - I happen to like a lot! Also like the use of rhyme and your Orange poem - wish I could do stuff like that - I'll have to try.
Isobel x

Jeff Dawson

Sun 12th Jul 2009 19:30

Hi Soph, thanx for letting me know, now worries have a good time at the festival and hope to see you at Wigan gig, just let me know if you're coming (and any others for that matter) and I will book you a slot, take care Jeff X

sally jenkinson

Fri 10th Jul 2009 23:44

do you come to bristol much? to visit the boy i mean? yikes, if you do giz a ring, we can go for cake! my number is 07799331727, meant to give it you anyways incase you're kicking about at latitude and fancy a crack. only a week to go! toot!
also, i heart yr cameron/bicycle poym x x x x

Tomás Ó Cárthaigh

Mon 6th Jul 2009 23:27

Loved Tragic tricks!!! lol

Jeff Dawson

Mon 6th Jul 2009 18:15

Hiya Soph, yes I surprise myself at times!! Aww thanx, yes to be honest apart from the funny stuff most of other stuff can have a serious message or is just down right deep!! Ha, thanx for having a read, if you back track theres all sorts! X

Anyway, well done you, am so impressed although not surprised, proud of you!! X To beat the competition at HB is no mean feat, great stuff!!

I will put you down for an open mic slot for next friday and can have a chat then see ya Jeff X

Isobel

Mon 6th Jul 2009 13:50

I would so love to chat to you on line but am supposed to be doing some school prep and only have an hour to go...Just wanted to say that there is a poetry night on Thursday at the Tudor also - I'll only be doing one number but you would get a wider variety of poets. It would be lovely to see you at either and Janet attends the Tudor also. How convenient having a Grandma here - I am sure someone in my party could give you a lift back to hers after. Toodle Pip. Isobel x
I

Isobel

Mon 6th Jul 2009 13:43

Those numbers are all really good ones - particularly the I don't need a hero - which is my favourite. I'm doing a 15 minute stint on Jefferama's busking for beer tour on Saturday 25th July at the Tudor in Wigan - do all students have cars nowadays? If not will have to make sure I attend one of the venues you go to some day. I am a tad nervous but also excited - I love the buzz of the stage - could manage without a piece of paper though. Look forward to seeing you again. Isobel xx

John Darwin

Mon 6th Jul 2009 08:41

Sophie, delighted to read about your win last night! Wish I had been there to see it. Brilliant!

John

Francine Louis

Mon 29th Jun 2009 00:41

Somewhat behind... what else is new?!
Thank you for taking the time to read through and comment on my poetry...
You are welcome to take my poems out to dinner any time you like Sophie...
They do enjoy a bit of exposure ; )

Chris Jam

Sun 21st Jun 2009 18:31

Do knoW WhaT sophiE I be avin a very tumultuous weekend much joY and much doubT creatinG challenges and youR wordZ in comment to YoYo lifteD me immensely so xXx 4 thaT I havE such a demanding eve that I cannot take the time ness 2 check youR dearth of creative workZ however when the kidZ are in dreaMlaND I gonna ingest suM oV youR shnizzle bizzle xXx agaiN

Joan

Thu 18th Jun 2009 18:04

Thanks for commenting on Crack Me Sophie. I have read through much of your poetry and am very impressed. I particularly like the one about being your own hero - such wisdom for one so young...

winston plowes

Wed 3rd Jun 2009 23:02

Hi Sophie. sadly I cannot play the youth card although aftera couple of shandys I have once or twice become sprightly. As for the hat... Good idea! I have a pink mohair deer stalker that might do the trick. Win x

winston plowes

Wed 3rd Jun 2009 22:54

Hi Sophie, Thanks for your comments. gladyou enjoyed the darker side of things (never going to go down well with the judges though I guess). Liked your spot too. but slow down a bit. Maybe it was the nervous energy that speeded you up! lol keep posting, keep reading. Win x

Isobel

Wed 3rd Jun 2009 22:22

I was very touched by your comment Sophie. Like Janet, I think you have potential to really wow them in the future. Your poetry is very different and out there. Once you master the nerves, slow it down and get the delivery right, you can only go from strength to strength. I thought you were very brave - I am a quivering wreck when I'm up there. I look forward to hearing you again.
Isobel x

Janet

Wed 3rd Jun 2009 13:39

Hi Sophie, i just wanted to say how much i really enjoyed your performance. Once you overcome the nerves of performing, you have great potential as a future winner so keep it up girl. Would also like to tell you after John Darwen, you were next in line with 4 other poets with the same points. Only 2 points difference to John.

See you soon, lots of encouragement, Janet Ramsden.x

George Stanworth

Fri 29th May 2009 15:05

Hi Sophie,
Sorry it has taken me a while to reply to your last comment. Yes I do read a lot. I perform in Hertfordshire and/or London quite often. Let me know if you're in the area and I will inform you if I am doing a gig around that time.
Cheers,
George

Jeff Dawson

Wed 27th May 2009 17:49

Hiya Soph, yes I've got in!

Good to hear you have too, I've seen you a couple of times now and I think you'll be fine, I'll email you separately with a bit more info - good luck! XX

Daniel Bresnahan

Tue 26th May 2009 22:12

Thanks for the comment on my poem.
How you doing?

clarissa mckone

Tue 26th May 2009 03:23

thanks Sophie, I may try and post again. xx

Tomás Ó Cárthaigh

Tue 26th May 2009 00:51

The Orange poem is cool... there is no real word that rhymes with it as far as I know...

Gus Jonsson

Mon 25th May 2009 23:25

Thanx Sophie
its was just a little cameo from a book I'm writing.
I'm pleased you liked it.
Many thanks once again
Gus x

Daniel Bresnahan

Mon 18th May 2009 22:26

'On my train journey' is a nice piece.
I liked the rhyme scheme you presented and also your vocab.

'To cascade through life with slight grace
And leap through years at our own pace'

Great lines.

Mia Darlone

Mon 18th May 2009 20:50

Thanks for your lovely messages. I really enjoyed your set on Saturday at the Blue Boar, look forward to seeing more of your stuff in the future! x

sally jenkinson

Mon 18th May 2009 00:40

hello miss brilliant, hopes your are well. yes i should be at latitude, toot! we can meet for coffee and talk sophisticatedly (its a word) about litterattcher, or we can drink cider and talk about boys! you know, whatever xx

Isobel

Sun 17th May 2009 19:31

It's up there now! Will I ever get over the nerves of posting a new piece? Before I post it I think it's ok, then I start to have hideous doubts...

Daniel Hooks

Sun 17th May 2009 17:52

I found the first part beautiful! the second part was definately like every train journey I have been on it captured the journey in a poetic and funny way!

Pete Crompton

Sun 17th May 2009 16:45

Hi Sophie, thanks for the velvet shirt comp. You could do well in slams I think. I had a couple of years of wins, prob entered about 30 slams now. They banned me in the end :-)

http://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=2165

its whatever you put into it, life.
x

George Stanworth

Sun 17th May 2009 16:11

Hi Sophie.
Just come across your work and I love the quality and variety of it. Particular favourites are 'Unrequited Love Song' and 'How to Like Pretentious Music' - I love the humour in that one.

George

Pete Crompton

Sun 17th May 2009 13:12

Brilliant poems and performance at the Blue Boar. Nice to meet you at last. Pete.

Jeff Dawson

Tue 12th May 2009 19:39

no we'll always find a slot for you !

see you saturday

jeff x

Jeff Dawson

Sat 9th May 2009 08:38

Hi Sophie

'People with mainstream Little Britain-esque senses of humour
That they all quote to each other endlessly until Ive fully developed a brain tumour…'

Love that, brilliant - I bet most are guilty of doing it! Social Services - great rant, would like to see you perform it.

This an Orange made me laugh, nice one! Just one thing, should you have bought it in Billinge? Its near Wigan, might be better - just a thought!

As for the unrequited love song, very interesting and I like your viewpoint as I thought it was just men that felt like that (maybe its just me!).

Good stuff but for the record Sophie from a mans point of view (or again maybe just mine) breasts of any size are fine, no need to discriminate!

Just need to read your blogs now! Hope you can make the Blue Boar next Sat, Jeff X

Isobel Malinowski

Fri 8th May 2009 08:41

Woops - I mis-spelt prejudice - wouldn't want anyone to hold it against me. I've always had a problem with that word. LOL

Jeff Dawson

Tue 5th May 2009 08:25

Hiya Sophie, fire away! Look forward to hearing what you think, there's lots of different themes to go at if you backtrack.

Don't worry, I need to have a closer look at yours so expect to hear from me soon!

Yes, be great to see you on 16th at Blue Boar. Hope you get in the slam. Best enter quickly if you haven't already. Its not too traumatic, honest and if you accept its a bit nervewracking you will enjoy it a bit more. 3 mins is quite a long time altough you might not be able to fit your social services or pretentious music ones in! Lol, will have a good read soon.

Right Sophie, hope to see you a week on saturday! Jeff X

Jeff Dawson

Mon 4th May 2009 16:27

Hiya Sophie!

Thanks ever so much for your comments - made my day! :-) Great to hear you like my work, the Ritz one flows well when performing, may be in the next slam if my entry accepted!

Yes will be good to see you in Bolton and nice to have a chat this time. Next slam 1st June but before that we are having a poetry and acoustic night in Bolton at the Blue Boar on 16th June, I will blog details soon but hope you can make that.

In the mean time I will have a read of some of your 'better' work and let you know what I think, cheers see ya soon, Jeff xx

David Franks

Mon 4th May 2009 10:13

Just enjoyed your witty verses, Sophie.

Gus Jonsson

Mon 27th Apr 2009 23:08

I've always wanted to be push up against the fridge... what a cool idea.
Thanks Sophie for your comments

Gusx

Daniel Bresnahan

Mon 27th Apr 2009 22:14

and I hope to read it sometime lol

Good luck with the revision,
keep in touch

Daniel Bresnahan

Mon 27th Apr 2009 22:00

Thanks a lot, it's my most recent poem,
if your intrested in pieces like that,
I have another just posted in samples.

I think poems with humour are good and I enjoy your writing, well what I've read so far anyway.

I know what you mean, I didn't expect any young writers on here either.

Daniel Bresnahan

Mon 27th Apr 2009 21:49

Hi, I was just browsing your profile and wanted to say your poem 'Social Services', well I really enjoyed it.

Janet

Wed 1st Apr 2009 21:12

Hi Sophie,
it was really nice to meet you too.
Yes i think you'd enjoy Wigan, there's lots of young people frequent the pub as well as the poets.
See you soon, sorry you have no net at present.
Janet.x :-)

Steve OConnor

Tue 31st Mar 2009 11:49

Hello Sophie

Good to see you here. Good to see that you've been made welcome by so many people. (The doors are locked, the windows nailed shut, you'll never be able to leave now!!!)

Thank you for your lovely comment. And yes, you should come to Freed Up. Not immediately - It's not on until Thursday 16th April and you'd have to wait for ages if you set off now.

I really like Unrequited Love Song. It's a funny poem, but there's also a lot of truth in it - a soupcon of spite to it which made me laugh.

Good stuff. More please.

Steve

KtD

Sun 29th Mar 2009 08:43

Hi Sophie, Yes I noticed we seem to be a minority here!!! I love your poetry, I just read the first few...I especially like the orange one, brilliant, and your style of rhyme is excellent...doesn't follow the crowd which is brilliant. Unrequited Love...i love the concept behind it, and the humour :) Nice work, I shall be reading more!!

Shane alexander stanisauskis

Thu 26th Mar 2009 16:48

Hi sophie! Erm jus responding to ur message, i produce electro/hiphop/anything that comes to my fingertips lol....Poetrys my side thing and im not sure if i succeed at that haha...But thanx for the compliment..! Ive been reading sum of ur stuff and im loving it! Its refreshing...X

Jordan Saxby

Wed 25th Mar 2009 17:34

You say your poems aren't sincere, and yet ive just read "social services" and it seems to perfectly express i mindset you were feeling, it definatly describes one i feel like every now and again! I really enjoyed reading it, its something quite different and that always makes me smile,

Thanks, glad you liked the poems,
Jordan

P.S. It was an amazing compliment, maybe ill write a better poem and go from glowing like a glow worm to one of those fish with the lights on he end of a stalk (actually im not sure, they're pretty ugly :S)

Shane alexander stanisauskis

Tue 24th Mar 2009 09:09

Hey sophie thanks for the comment...(i think) lol....Not all my stuff is like this haha...Im a happy soul in a tortured body lol...Guna av a read of ur work and see wot ur about..Im a musician also! Gud luk wiv it! X

Janet

Sun 22nd Mar 2009 22:49

It's a week on Monday the 30th March.
Chat soon.
Janet.x

Janet

Sun 22nd Mar 2009 22:40

Hi again,
yes it was meant as a compliment :-)

I think it's great to get some younger people on here. Personally, i think performance poetry allows for the dreaded telling.
It's difficult to glean intended imagery in a poem from a performnce which lasts about 3 to 5 mins on average. It's the page poetry i need a lot of practice with. Creating imagery with less cliché.

It'll be great to meet you soon.
I'm going to the slam event at Bolton on Monday but i haven't actually applied to perform so if you can make it i'll see you there. :-)
Janet.x

Janet

Sun 22nd Mar 2009 22:16

Hi Sophie,
thanks for your lovely comment. Not all my stuff is like the ones on my profile at present.
Like you, i'm on a journey of discovery with writing and will attempt almost any style whether it turns out well or not.
All the ones you have posted here would be great performed.

I took a bit of a break from the venues over winter but am just about ready to visit a few again now.
Wigan is local to me so the obvious one for regular attendance but i've been to Bolton. Middleton once but will go again soon. I fully intend to get to Hebden this summer too.

Which ones do you attend?
Janet.x

Anthony Emmerson

Sun 22nd Mar 2009 11:54

Hi Sophie,
And oops - sorry, I hit "add comment" before my thought processes had warmed up (a regular occurence these days) - please delete. Thanks for taking a stroll through my messy and overcrowded junkyard of a blog, and for your generous and flattering (and entirely undeserved) comments. You have encouraged me to get out my marigolds and feather duster and have a good old spring clean.
I like your work very much. It's fresh, inventive, unpretentious and honest - often rare qualities these days. Please don't go to war with me - I'm a lover, not a fighter! (whimper, simper!) I'm not sure I like some of the competitive aspects of modern poetry, I always see it as an art rather than a full-on-contact-bloodsport. Nevertheless, I would like someday to get to one of those northern gigs that are touted so much on here - but are so far away for me, and have a bash at spouting my own drivel. Maybe one day. Keep it coming Sophie, You're doing great!
Regards,
A.E.

Pete Crompton

Sat 21st Mar 2009 22:02

"We’re properly buggered.
And I’m top of the list
To get a good rogering from mass apocalyptic bliss.
I’d go if I could. No really I would…"

Oh my god, its amazing.
Its like taking the lid off a box full of star systems. errrrrrr I'm so liking the show dear!

Florescent children in the cavities!
wowwww this is surreal city

I enjoyed your poetry.

Siren

Sat 21st Mar 2009 17:15

Hi Soph,

Great conversational style you've got going on there. Keep it up, and hopefully see you at Inn Verse. Us MMUers are getting about a bit aren't we?

Anthony Emmerson

Sun 8th Mar 2009 23:01

Hi Sophie.
Just dropping in to say that I loved "Social Service." Cleverly constructed and would be great to listen to. Welcome, and I hope you have fun here.
Regards,
A.E.

Deborah R Jordan

Sat 7th Mar 2009 10:43

Hi Sophie, I like to read at 1 in the morning too, when the silence wraps around me like the warm bedcovers.. so long as the neighbourhood cats aren't setting off car alarms, they get bored bless them...Thank you for reading my words at that hour and your kind comments. : ) Deb

Cayn

Sat 7th Mar 2009 09:39

Hi Sophie, cheers for your kind comments! :)

winston plowes

Thu 5th Mar 2009 01:09

Hi Sophie
Like your Oranginess poem, strange and different. Winston

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