hokku

a sudden sunlight
dapples the wet tar;
following the moon

the mouse hides
from tree and berry
planes run diagonal

a sudden sunlight
dapples the wet tar;
following the moon

the mouse hides
from tree and berry
planes run diagonal

a breeze caresses
honey-potted nectar
cherry blossom shock

the hawk skies
mottled heather bowling
parallel and bucking

Hi Keith
I think we should try another one of these (or maybe the same one revised) but I think you must first of all give us the rules you are using - there seem to be so many variations - and then act as the shuhits: The "secretary" of the renga, as it were, who is responsible for overseeing the proceedings of the renga i.e. telling us the form of the next verse(s).

Mr Daftie, how r we this eve?

How about a 20 liner' with and after the 20th line a new subject or topic.
Star with the hokku, introduction as western as possible- subject, say 'performance poetry in winter' or can be anything as long as ref to seasons- but with our contemporary heads on we can make it a bit more AG
The hokku is a haiku 575 - keep it tight!
then a double 7 or waki
then haiku or daisen which has a shift or change in the sound of the last word in the stanza giving scope for the next stanza
Key is to click and shift- move the connecting words like a jenga block- say- sunshine-daisy-June etc The association is with the space between the words. It's non narrative- sense is with our own Interpretation-

Renga: you know it makes sense.

OK Mr Hilling I think I understand where you are coming from
Can anyone who is interested tell us here before we start then Keith can direct who is to go next with info on what he expects.
Ta

I forgot to say, I believe we need a minimum of 4 poets to do this
So come on all you great poets - say you will

Hi Sophie,
Hopefully we're gonna have a bit of fun, you can find all the stuff you need to know at the link below
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Renga