Today’s Relationship- the Latest Version
Today’s relations are full of materialism
Love is now only a term, Loves comes with full of conditions
Parent’s love, siblings ‘s love too are fading away with time
And nobody bothers to get it rewind

Everybody is running to chase things, busy in temporary world
Losing diamonds in search of glitters

Now Relationship hardly have to do anything with love
Looking for Love, attachments, feelings and emotions are all fool’s stuff

People are concentrating more on non-living things
Unconditional love is just diminishing

Relations are like give and take, exchange of gifts, and profit and loss statement
Love is only a physical pleasure, to have treasure of materialistic things with missing sentiments

Unconditional love, sympathy, empathy, respect, humanity, kindness all are old versions
Betrayal, false emotions, formalities, cruelty, hatred and inhumanity are new versions
 

Hi Bindu

Thanks for posting.
You've chosen a very direct approach here.

Everybody is blah blah blah, relationships are... people are... love is...

I think of this style as "finger wagging", it leans into the reader's face, shouting. I don't find the approach user-friendly but I guess it has its uses.
I also think the reader is entitled to consider whether every finger-wagging poet has discovered something new under the sun. Or not.

This poem is a list of negative opinions. I don't find the entirety of existence quite so distressing. An obvious counter-illustration is the birth of a baby: practically everyone concerned, practically every time, understands a wonderful miracle to have occurred putting everything else in perspective. Those concerned may be drug addicts, criminal bastards etc, it makes no difference.

Your poem is quite long and covers a great deal of territory but beyond the bald declarations there is a lack of detail or depth. Perhaps a little more would engage your readers and make your case more persuasive.

Thanks for your feedback...great advise..will improve it

Here what i have experienced, what i felt, I wrote...yes it is a direct approach..it can be generalized..

You may be able to further improve this piece if you remove the word 'with' in the line "Love comes with full of conditions". Say it aloud both with and without it and see which sounds more natural or better in your own thoughts. Hope this helps.?

Thanks for your feedback...