Keep out means keep in
It always did
Always will
Any cartridge box
pack of pills
Regardless, the cure of ills
The childhood mind seeks
makes the kills of curiosity
He may tread wild
Or softly
But prying hands so cunningly reach
Behind mothers rules
The words that preach
Safety
Yet cupboard door is sure to slide
On polished floor a nightly glide
Of why
Why not
What is and where
Why are adults so poking there?
Why so the daggers cloaking me
I will drink that whisky
And steal those pills
I will engage in teenage thrills
Just as soon as the reigns are off.

The room is shrinking , ma!
You hypocrite, you drinking da!
You withholders of keys to the car
You forgers of argument scar

Keep out means keep in

It is inevitable.



2007

I have to agree with Sophie. This poem avoids complicated words allowing the structure and theme to carry it along. There are nuances in many of your works, Pete. They are instantly recognisable as 'yours' , as your style is so original and having seen it performed, it's difficult not to 'hear you' when you read. Loved it.

A big thank you to you Mr Thomas

have missed you not being at howcroft, really wanted to chat.


re- the simple words in the poems

yes its good to do, but you know, i find myself using the same words, I wouldlike to try and step back and write from a different perspective but some say dont change a style.

Would love to go on a poetry workshop and see what new things to learn

the idea behind the jealousy poem was a bar fight, or close to it happening.

also I found the ones you just write straight out end up being the most honest and the most poplular.

if I try and do a 'concept' poem it does not always work.

I wrote a five minute poem called 'MOAB' a kind of political thing and its drawn out, hmmmm

off to have a think on how to improve / develop / keep moving forward etc.
my ambition gets in the way.................

Great clean lines to the poem that leave the reader on know doubt.

Bravo, Highly enjoyable.

Should writers be resticted to one style? NO

Its like asking a baby not to cry when it can not yet speak.

Peoms should reflect your mood, sentiment or message not tethered by comvention. Ownership of the words you write is the only style one needs.

Peter you don't just own the words you live them.

There is a good general discussion?

cheers

Phil

Scatter Gun Poet