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Love in a charcoal shell

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inspired by our apparent obsession with tabloid love tales

 

Love in A charcoal Shell

Miss Maldives, Miss coral shoal
Your eyes have turned to coal
Crush them to make diamonds
Then ill really see the stars in your eyes
Squeeze so tightly upon the ghost of you
Wanting all of the real you back
I’m just loving a carcass
A fragile shell of carbon
For our love has been flamed
Eroded
Hung in the halls of shame
Beaten, surrounded and goaded
By the obsessive few, the corroded
The Fleet Street information overloaded
They pickled themselves
Under roofs of tin
The consummated preserve of a rotten harvest
Like demonic elves raining in
In a gathering of spellbinding sin
The witches have their cauldrons
The men have their shackles
Walked upon by high heel
And pierced by the cackles and laughs
Confused etchings of a spiro-graph
Is how his mind feels.
He has no idea where to put these feelings
So he draws a circle on the bar
And keeps them within
He sees her as charcoal now, distant
A new model of the old
He used to be persistent in chasing her
Now hes told he never makes the first move
And that gone are the letters that used to prove his love
Wilted are the flowers, in a stainless grey sink
He shoves his head
The only place to think
Apart from the oven, and the stiffest drink
So many chemicals and gases
Carbon monoxide
He has had classes in poison
And taken gulps from the glasses of Charcoal
Hoping for the antidote
Hanging under the rim of a homburg
As sad as  the shadow
on a Hiroshima wall
Theres is no one home anymore
Beauty belongs to the beholder
Who’s is to say my world of ash
Is not as aesthetic as your greenest grass
From cinders comes the living
And in baroness the beauty
With every parasite burned away
Paving a path of pure for fresh feelings to lay
I will pray for strength to stem the decay
And bite upon those who hands shall prey on mine
That may wrap upon this oaken door
Ill clasp us in a hasp
So that my new found love may be secure
Ill hold your body of ash
For in black I find you pure
A most forgiving colour
In ample flesh there is allure
Every curve and fold a finger tours
Warming hand upon the scores I draw along your spine
Smilingly internal, confident you are mine
On the outside a slave
In the inside mined of feeling
those hitting hands behave
In the most sadistic way
A spoonful of silver helps the helpless
And starves the poor
 

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clarissa mckone

Sun 25th Apr 2010 02:11

I really enjoyed this poem, it was full of feelings about things we all have opinions on. I could careless for tabloids and whom ever is in them.At times while in line, Ill read the front page of one and feel sad for the people within.This poem shows your person is just full of your care.That poor girl, she is pretty in a fake way, and has no real her or real love ever.she is plastic.you can almost make out the silicone ball in the breast.

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Val Cook

Sat 24th Apr 2010 09:19

"For in black I find you pure
A most forgiving colour
In ample flesh there is allure
Every curve and fold a finger tours
Warming hand upon the scores I draw along your spine
Smilingly internal, confident you are mine."
Brilliant Pete as usual. Celebrities :-(

Pete Crompton

Fri 23rd Apr 2010 20:38

Cynthia, this first draft would benefit form some abridgement and yes some stanzas would be good. Im quite happy witht the core concept and theres some couplets I love in here like (Shadow/Hiroshima)

Idea wise it wanders a little but with a tight thread, it all poured out exact as you read it which how i usally work, ideally I would have a manager to proof read and edit my work. thank you for your comments which I respect x

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 23rd Apr 2010 20:26

It is good, Pete. Is it possible to break the lines into parts/stanzas? I felt a bit overwhelmed, squashed by the tight print for a longer poem. I'm only asking.

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Andy N

Thu 22nd Apr 2010 13:45

really enjoyed this, pete.. be interested to see how you would perform this as it is a bit different i felt!

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Francine

Thu 22nd Apr 2010 03:52

Tu sais tout ce que je pense déjà ; )
xxxxx

Pete Crompton

Wed 21st Apr 2010 22:07

thanks Steve and Ann, this poem was written whilst driving, a new technique! (ok ok the idea was formed) Its not my pic but I love the pic ! Im going to frame it, print it out and frame it, need to find the photographer and get the real thing from his CRW file or negative.

<Deleted User> (4597)

Wed 21st Apr 2010 21:43

I'm so glad I've come back to WoL; I've missed you and your words.
This poem is simply brilliant.

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 21st Apr 2010 19:58

what an amazing poem. solidly full of images/ideas, cruelty, pain, adoration, the lot!

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