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falling in love by surprise

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When you’re unaware.

That’s when I can touch you

lose my fingers in your hair

stroke your arm, caress your shoulder.

When you’re unaware.

 

When you’re unaware.

That’s when I can watch you

from my window, from the stair.

Watch you as you’re working

and admire you if I dare.

When you’re unaware.

 

Take you by surprise.

Just as you’re concentrating,

love the blueness of your eyes

expressions lighting up your face.

I’m in love and I am waiting

just to take you by surprise.

When you’re unaware.

 

I was running on a track

in the dull and dreary darkness

of my loss and of my lack.

Then you came upon me

and I looked into your eyes.

The world turned in an instant

as you took me by surprise.

While I was unaware.

 

 

 

 

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Chris Dawson

Fri 2nd Jul 2010 14:16

Like this very much Ann, and like everyone else - particularly the twist.
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<Deleted User> (7212)

Wed 30th Jun 2010 16:15

I love the twist at the end - comes as a complete surprise
(in spite of the title, I didn't see it coming)

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Wed 30th Jun 2010 09:12

Beautiful poem Ann. I love it. With warmest wishes, Larisa

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Andy N

Wed 30th Jun 2010 08:15

defo song like quality to this, Ann. The twist round at the end works pretty well too.. Nice one! x

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John Coopey

Tue 29th Jun 2010 19:56

Lovely Ann. Nice turn at the end.

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Ann Foxglove

Tue 29th Jun 2010 19:01

For a friend who helped me through grief - and he never knew!

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