Love?
Love Levels of happiness suddenly appear. Obvious signs of affection. Very much alive, with everything to live for. Expressive, emotive and full of excitement. You think you’ll never find love- But never say never. Friends may come and go, But love, is forever. Like a muster of peacocks, Love is ever so bright. If what you’ve found is true love... It must be held tight. Love- So true, with its simplicity. That tranquil feeling, Yet you’re still exploding with electricity. Love is a mystery- Love is in the moment, Love is the best cure. Love is what you make it, But is your love pure?
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Wed 14th Jul 2010 10:24
'tranquil' yet 'explosive' is very good. There are many good lines here. This would be read more easily if it were in 'poetry form'. Perhaps you need to copy the material from a Word Document to retain the layout? And then, it would be easier to see where 'extra' words can be removed, words that may not need repeating. What is your definition of 'pure love'?