Donations are essential to keep Write Out Loud going    

Flecks of grey

The sky and sea merge

Into strange flecks of grey.

Neither fish nor fowl

Predominate.

There is a lot of empty space.

And that dull, withdrawing roar

Of yesteryear.

Last year, on this very  day, 

Of shock and awe,

was your funeral:

wildflowers on your coffin

an emptiness inside

I read your poem 'Lemon Light'

Then there were 'Eden Rock and 'Adelstrop'

You knew all the hedgerow flowers of Cheshire

Didn't you Chris?

You listened to and named

all the birds of the Cheshire plain

Without you, nothing is the same.

 

🌷(7)

◄ Throwing stones at the stars

Lemon light ►

Comments

Profile image

Clare

Thu 15th Jun 2023 20:30

John, what is there to say? So much and yet so little that is of any worth. I am thinking of you in this difficult pause. If it can be of any comfort ( which I am sure it cannot) Your experiences have bought to us your most exquisite writing. I am only sorry that you have had to experience such pain to bring us into your extraordinary world. I am in awe of your poetry and humbled by your spirit. Thank you for being you and sharing bits of yourself with us.

Profile image

John Marks

Thu 15th Jun 2023 13:57

Thank you Keith, Winds Solar, Stephen, Clare and John. Yes, Keith, I wish that I had the botanical skills that Chris had in abundance. WS your voice will be lyrical and beautiful. I love listening to the quiet voices of poetry. I hate the rowdy shouty voices of the arrogantly clueless. There are many here on WOL who will help you.

love life in a form that is not your own and be indulgent toward those who are growing old, who are afraid of the aloneness that you trust.... and don't expect any understanding; but believe in a love that is being stored up for you like an inheritance, and have faith that in this love there is a strength and a blessing so large that you can travel as far as you wish without having to step outside it.

Rainer Maria Rilke,
Letters to a Young Poet

Profile image

winds solar

Thu 15th Jun 2023 13:01

John since I have only just started writing poetry I don't think I am in a position to give a fair respectful analysis of your poem but as a lay person I can say that from reading it as it is I find it quite beautifully written. I hop that is ok?

Profile image

keith jeffries

Thu 15th Jun 2023 09:27

John, a gentle eulogy of a boy made aware of his surroundings.. Few parents take such an interest in their children now a days. I was left to ramble alone and discover. Even to this day living thousands of miles away I can name all the trees, wild flowers and shrubs of my native landscape. At school we were taken on nature rambles. These outings were precious moments in childhood as we became acquainted with the world about us and the land of our birth.
A tender memory caught in a poem of real worth.
Thank you for this,
Keith

If you wish to post a comment you must login.

This site uses cookies. By continuing to browse, you are agreeing to our use of cookies.

Find out more Hide this message