September Sunset
Golden windows
And golden walls.
Silver back surfers
Riding through the fall.
I'm here waiting
Comiserating-
Why can't I stay in the Golden halls?
The trees are embers.
There are apples on the floor.
I get the feeling
death is at my door.
wish I could stay in the golden halls.
The golden halls.
The golden halls.
Wish I could stay in the golden halls.
This is about the feeling you get during a September sunset, and you know a long winter is just around the corner. Sending lots of love to my fellow S. A. D. sufferers <3
It's a touch repetitive which I hoped would convey a sense of rumination. Just like the days are getting shorter, each part is shorter than the last.
This is my first attempt at writing a poem and feedback is welcome, just be KIND!
John Gilbert Ellis
Wed 13th Sep 2023 14:24
Like that. Intrigued by the line 'silver back surfers riding through the fall' and what you had in mind.