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In Rothiemay 'They' Still Children

 

 

     There is a fine drizzle here,

A typical post summer indication of Autumn blues,

   I walk childlike - glad of the company of a spirited woman

that age has no unpleasantry to sponsor. 

 

     The dusk has Starship Ferguson keen to paint 

new lay-lines and then;

   an echo of young stealing the air

with soccer talk steals too, my own solemnity

of history I mourn; has passed.

 

     The trainer be a new Brian Glover,

the team are upon a bird known Kes,

   the lay-lines sparkle and so too,

  my shrine of all things forgotten. 

 

     The bairns are soaked to the skin

as the football passes considerately brave,

  their expiration of breath draws clouds - like I and

  my brother once did, like many upon an

estate in Manchester known Scot.

 

     Thier ruddy glow warms my soul

as I consider an eighties chant of a football enthusiast,

Man U gets a mention, Pele too, Ronaldo and 

I scream inwardly; 'What about Dalglish?'

 

     In our homes, our children yearn for football speak,

our children yearn for skipping rope,

     'but are considered only arcade games,

         a disposition and taking of spirit that never encourages warmth.'

 

     I am here before the lay-lines,

I look to those above now knowing of our sorrow,

  In Rothiemay 'they' still are, children,

     'in Manchester, away!'

 

     There are no cities here a parent wants,

there are no arcade games too,

     'only an understanding, 'we' wish all, are Rothiemay.'

 

Michael J Waite Friday 22nd of September 2023. 

     dedicated to Shona, Rothiemay, and a growing conscience to bring back the love. 

 

 

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Ferris Ty Taylor

Sat 23rd Sep 2023 22:17

Fascinating. This one was hard for me to penetrate, but rewarding. I don't understand the idiosyncrasies of the setting, but this piece conveys the lonely, intelligent voice of a weary observer, and it's very compelling.

To me the message of Kes is that if you love something, you have to let be free to leave if it wants to, and let it come back to you if it chooses. This works for friendships and relationships very well, I find. As the poem evokes Kes, this theme underlies this piece and there is a sense that the narrator has let go of their past, and is unsure if they want it back.

(I could be entirely wrong, but the genius of this dynamic works very well for me as a reader)
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