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Broken Record's Repetition

For me, 

Please,

Stop cutting.

I said.

A broken record.

 

Only now,

As she lays in the grave,

Six feet under.

I wonder

if things would have changed,

If I just once asked her to

Stop cutting,

Please,

For you. 

 

Would it have made a difference, though?

The reason to cut or not remains 

the same, either way.

Nothing can change that here

She now lays,

Serene and calm,

No frown etched into her face.

 

The only proof 

she was ever alive,

the scars she gained

trying to escape 

her life.

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Comments

Yasoda

Wed 21st Aug 2024 19:26

Thank you for reassuring my heart, Graham! Appreciate it a lot 💓

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 21st Aug 2024 13:28

Yasoda the beauty of poetry is that you can write and punctuate it as you please. There are few rules.
I do not use capitals at the start of each line like some do. It doesn’t matter as long as it reads well!

Yasoda

Wed 21st Aug 2024 12:23

Hey Linda, thank you for the lovely comment! It's true, I do struggle a bit with puncuation as english is not my first language and grammar and punctuation differs from my mother language, but I will try to improve and learn along the way! Thanks again 💗💗

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Linda Guittar

Wed 21st Aug 2024 02:03

You emit emotion expertly ... The punctuation is a bit questionable ... sit on your poems for a bit and update them as inspiration hits. You are so good!!!

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