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for my grandfather

 

When I first came on a visit

to your lime-washed house

– a clean-kneed child from town –

your two great fists

 

impressed me, for they

were ponderous chunks

of granite, notched

carelessly for fingers

 

and which, at your own willed

creation, you had torn

from the heart of the land.

Yes, I knew then how

 

you had risen and, separate,

had kept on walking.

I was almost frightened

to be your friend, but still

 

am running so breathlessly

beside you, as you stride

onwards, the castle of yourself,

across rough fields

 

of thistle and clover.

And the dog is running

before us and laughter

creates a flawless sky.

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Stephen Atkinson

Sun 4th Feb 2024 15:55

laughter
creates a flawless sky.
A great final line for a great poem. 🌈

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Greg Freeman

Sun 4th Feb 2024 08:55

Thanks for posting, David. Always good to see your poems on Write Out Loud. David's Collected Poems was published last year, folks. Just saying! https://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=128991

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keith jeffries

Sat 3rd Feb 2024 18:21

This poem automatically drew me to the far north. Some great expressions with a nostalgic flavour,
Thank you for this,
Keith

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