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a flick of a switch

and darkness crept into each corner of the room,

tracing each surface

and caressing each crack  

until each speck of dust

breathed in black.

 

a slight sigh

left her lips

and hung momentarily in the air -

feelings

that seemed so effervescent in the day

dissipated swiftly

as soon as they came.

 

and soon

shadows intertwined

into a labyrinth of time:

sprouting shoots nudge against

the marcescent foliage of seasons past,

twisting and turning against the uneven soil

which beds the depth of her mind…

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darkvoidfatiguemodern lifeuncertainty

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David RL Moore

Mon 10th Jun 2024 12:32

Hi Syc,

The use of a coded title is a great idea which leans into the subsequent verse like a gentle ramp.

The verses envelope the reader as if they are the encroaching darkness described in the text, a very effective use of words revealing the process depicted.

The final verse seems to describe the rejuvenating quality of sleep. I momentarily thought it might be describing some kind of illness in the subject...on second reading clarity came.

Subtle and clever writing with a good measure of beauty.

David

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