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The Last Carriage

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I sit on the waiting seat on the station,

Not alone,

Many friends are waiting as well,

We share the same destination.

 

Not long after, the train arrives.

I look at my ticket,

"Ah, not my train", I say.

Some friends board,

They wave their hands,

We exchange smiles,

I'm left with the unfinished puzzle in my hand.

 

Not long after, another train arrives.

I look at my ticket,

"Ah, not my train", I say.

Some friends board again,

They wave their hands,

We exchange smiles,

With the puzzle still in my hands,

I begin to wonder, "Why doesn’t the ticket have a departure time?"

 

Not long after, another train arrives.

Some friends board again,

This time, they pull my hand,

I look at my ticket,

I release their grasp,

I say, "That's not my train, you go ahead"

They wave their hands,

We exchange smiles,

I'm still with my puzzle,

 

Time keeps passing,

There are almost no friends left waiting,

I finish my puzzle.

 

Not long after, the train arrives.

I look at my ticket,

"Ah, this is my train," I say

This time, I pull the hands of my remaining friends,

They look at their tickets,

They release my grasp,

They say, "That's not our train, you go ahead"

I wave my hand,

But, no wave returns.

 

After getting off the train

The puzzle I had been working on is neatly framed

 

I look around,

The station is empty now.

Ironically, I don’t know where the remaining friends are headed

All I know is I boarded the last carriage of the day

 

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Yanma Hidayah

Wed 25th Sep 2024 19:54

@Uilleam Ó Ceallaigh, Does it sound like that?😅 Actually, it's a metaphor for a phase I went through, kind of a quarter-life crisis thing.
By the way, thank you for being nice to everyone😊

Uilleam Ó Ceallaigh

Wed 25th Sep 2024 19:23

The makings of a ghost story?😧

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