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Drunk

The flood stole in throughout the night,

she listened from an upstairs room

for cattle moaning in their stalls

and those who could no longer speak.

The silence brought the stars to sky

and then the trickle, gulp and suck

that blanketed the roads and fields

reflecting pallor of the dawn.

From window to window she went and heard

the first uncertain song of birds.

And as the dark was washed away

she saw his body floating by

the garden hedge, so peacefully,

as if at last he’d found in death

serenity which life denied.

But when her son had dragged him in,

a sodden, heavy heap of meat,

she pressed her head and rolled her eyes

and howled the awfulness to sleep.

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David RL Moore

Thu 28th Nov 2024 07:15

Hi Ray,

Many images well painted in this idea. For me it was like a picture board, I read it several times and got the rythm of it...it flows nicely leading the reader from frame to frame.

What I do like about it is the perspective from which it is told, it's a simple idea which manages to leave room for the reader to fill in the gaps for themselves.

A timely poem at the moment. I'm curious about the title... I have my own idea of what it refers to but will keep it to myself.

Thanks for giving me some interesting scenescapes on a cold frosty morning.

David

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