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Bull Rushes

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With one side a sprawling urban metropolis polluting the views

Creeping over the earth’s surface like a cancerous growth

On the other side lay an industrial waterway, an actuary of black blood

This tear on the landscape, carved by industrialist’s brandishing a dagger

Metal skeletons with arms carrying huge cables, veins of power

They are comic book hero’s lifting the twenty-first century over my oasis

A gritted conduit leads this weary traveller between green curtains

The drapes part every time, like an opening night on a Broadway Musical

A symphony of songs chorused from the hidden orchestra on every branch

The auditorium flew into my vision from all sides demanding my attention

Transfixed by this tableau I effortlessly glided to my front row seat

Captured by this scene I took a deep clean breath drawing in the tranquillity

The purity invaded every part of my being capturing the stresses of the day

My chest contracted, expelling inner pollutants, as my body visibly relaxed

Mother Nature embraced this glade, on all sides, with multiple shades of green

Before me this serenity was completed by a shallow expanse of muddied water

At its centre a small island capped off by three spindly trees, with hints of leaves

They looked like a rebellious rock band refusing to conform to luscious greenery

Fans surrounded their island stage, long slender stems breaching watery floor

Brown heads topped off each stem waving their adulation to their rock band

Ripples appeared on sun kissed watery surface as a breeze billowed the drapes

The ‘Bull Rushes’ swayed to a unique rhythm, bobbing their heads in unison

Their touching leaves were hands sounding load applause for the spindly band

Closing my eyes, in my mind, I too was swaying and clapping my appreciation

Two cracks resounded around the auditorium, was it a backfiring car!

Sharp pain seared through my head, blood glided across my field of vision

Head swayed back and forth, I’m weakening, can’t stand, light fading

I scream my last for help; birds fled, I crumpled falling amidst the ‘Bull Rushes’

 

© Phil Golding 05/08

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Comments

<Deleted User> (4281)

Mon 12th May 2008 04:49

Phil, your poem is multi descriptive, well written with a reality issues as well as some fiction incorporated in your lines. You have presented good story to read. I think every Country has its own issues with pollutions. Great work!

Thank you,
Zuzanna

Pete Crompton

Sun 11th May 2008 23:23

this is wonderful Phil
I reckon though to leave us in the tranquil place
rather than the fall
I know what you mean to contrast the image and its ok but......you would make a great little story for relaxation with this!!! just lose the last lines and you got a therapy on the go!

well played

(constructive ideas the poem works for me both ways)

great to see you advancing up an up Phil

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clarissa mckone

Sun 11th May 2008 17:20

Hi Phil, this is a very nice story, I did enjoy reading it. Down the way from my home, is a mini lake, where people fish and birds hang out, and all the plant life is just as you say.I try and drive past it everyday. Then down about 3 miles is a very large lake, where you can see boats everyday and people at play, but one side of the lake is wet lands, the other, is some sort of refinery belching smoke.Huge comercial type buildings, that mess up the looks and life of it all.I loved your story! thanks

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Jeff Dawson

Sun 11th May 2008 14:30

Like it Phil, I do a lot of fishing so I know what you mean cheers Jeff

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