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All Lies.

Forget you to other faces,

other places and names I must remember,

voices, cups of tea with two sugars instead of one.

Forget you to their smiles and their daily crisis,

forget you as another face in the crowd,

to how many people I must have met by now,

how I'm seeing them at three instead of you.

Forget you to clock-tickings, time passing,

wrinkles that will begin appearing.

Forget you by the second bottle

forget you like the other ones six months gone.

Forget you by my tenth cigarette of the night.

You'd think I would, only I won't, it's all lies.

◄ Blue Turning Grey.

Made Me Feel (Like Marilyn Monroe). ►

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Graham Sherwood

Mon 23rd Aug 2010 20:43

I'm not a big fan of poems that repeat the same words such as here Forget You.
However, when I ignore the repetitions, the words are really very pleasing and applicable. I like your work Georgina.

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Andy N

Mon 23rd Aug 2010 08:16

nice stuff Georgina.

one minor thing for to perhaps consider..

on the bit you write..

Forget you to their smiles and their daily crisis,

forget you as another face in the crowd,

I think you may want to put a full stop at the end of 'Forget you to their smiles and their daily crisis' as it seems to stop for a second when i was reading this back.

top stuff thou.. enjoyed this a lot

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