The Kiss
the kiss shouted passionately
you anguished tenderly
we kissed a placid mouth late
a desire loved us
the flower cuddled the languishing kiss slowly
she anguished desperately
a breeze anguished
the nice kiss anguished
a misery danced for you
the stormy love shouted tenderly
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Sat 25th Sep 2010 17:26
This is very interesting with its play upon the opposites of 'anguish' and 'languish' and other related 'juxta's'; There's a word for the opening and closing lines switching meanings, but I can't remember it right now; it's a good technique. But I sure would lose 'nice' and smack my poetry muse for good measure.