I’m Gone

Wednesday 25th June 2008 11:37 am

Without an excuse, I must leave

Do not misunderstand me

Your fear stole my internal peace

Banned my thoughts, my beliefs,

Your hands are so cold

Possessed by a certain inner doubt

Making me run before I even walk

Trapped with an awkward quiet sound,

Your eyes set a fire

Burning any delicacy whatsoever

Neither hope, nor trust exist

Struck your head in distress,

You’re infinitely strange to yourself

Your intentions are hard to tell

Reasons dismissed, chances being thrown

And I’m gone; I’m gone.

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<Deleted User> (5646)

Fri 27th Jun 2008 11:16

Thanks Mirna, Which probably explains the shiver down my spine.
Heaven and hell is a place on earth.
I see now that your poem reflects feelings of love in general and not with one person in mind.
Very individual style of writing which i do enjoy reading. Better still when i can ask about what i can't see in it.
Thanks for your very kind response to my request. Janet.x

<Deleted User> (5022)

Fri 27th Jun 2008 09:34

Thank you Janet, well for me,It’s all about things that can only be felt.
How each one understands love; and how love sometimes can be received as hate, doubt, fear and aggressiveness, you can feel it every time you’ve been held, every moment you look through the eyes, in time of silence where showing love has totally disappeared; it's about what lies behind paradise, might be hell for real.

<Deleted User> (5646)

Thu 26th Jun 2008 23:25

Your poem really is very deep, so deep that i couldn't get into what lies behind the words.
To be honest it sent a shiver down my spine, very unusual. I've read it about six times and the same thing happens each time.
I don't suppose you could see your way to explaining a little could you? I'm intrigued.
Love Janet.x

<Deleted User> (5022)

Wed 25th Jun 2008 11:40

Thank you, and you're absolutely right, "stole" is the right word, thank you :).

<Deleted User> (4744)

Wed 25th Jun 2008 11:33

"Your fear stole my internal peace" ... great line. Not sure "stolen" is quite right for the flow.

Really enjoyed this deep piece of writing.

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