Natural Disasters And Nuclear Foreplay
The deepest indecent recess.
A matter of fact lacking any magic.
When will it be finished?
Wicked stricken thinning
Of war torn storm stories.
Could flood mud flutter.
Trade maimed grades of shade.
Any manufactured tragedy
Holds old ropes folding closed.
Relevant enemies shedding menace.
Grip fit sitting inflexed infinity.
Learn certain concerns dirt flirting.
Fast at last shadow dancing.
Redefined climb righteous mining.
Class wrapped clarity.
Use of fusion nuclear ruins.
Forever mending the end.
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Wed 16th Mar 2011 10:53
This is quite a display of linguistic skill, all that assonance, internal rhyming, alliteration etc. etc. In spite of deliberate verbal acrobatics, you still manage to make some clever points when taken line by line. Did you perhaps mean: 'maimed' or 'named' with 'mamed'? I like that we have no hint of your diction intent in the title. Would you consider making stanza 1 only 4 lines in sync with the other stanzas, for great visual formatting?