when that daylight hit us again (inspired by Gareth Writer-Davies' Junk poem)
them rattling dirty hours
when
night melted away
and
the sun boiled up
and we were
there
inside
ripped
torn
straight off the
bone
them days were
hard
but essential
deadly but
so on fire
them days were
slow and
vicious
new and
easy
we were doing something
inevitable
reaching out from
our mad youth
and we might not have
made it
we might not have
escaped
as the daylight
searched for us
pulled us
free
them days burnt
left scars
but
I won’t
miss them
I won’t
regret
a thing
Gareth Writer-Davies
Tue 29th Mar 2011 21:10
Oy!!
But seriously, thanks for using my poem as a springboard and thanks for your supercharged comments : )
"The sun boiled up"
"We were doing something/inevitable"
Great lines, nice poem