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Walls of Mine

These walls of mine
stand as tall as towers,
threatening to steal the sun,
but still I look up,
defying these brick stones
keeping me standing in one place.
These walls of mine
cage me in,
keeping the world
just out of my reach,
but my hands have begun
to break the stones.
These walls mock me
for they still tower above,
they still keep me here,
and here I stand
with dreams in me
begging to break
these walls of mine.
These walls will fail
the test of time
because my wings have grown,
and my dreams
are about to touch the sky.
And when I look back,
there will no longer remain
these walls
of mine.


Walls of Mine
by, Melissa R. Mendelson

◄ Standing Above Water

Sending My Love Across The Distance ►

Comments

<Deleted User> (5646)

Mon 14th Jul 2008 10:30

Hi Melissa, once again the rhythm comes through in your writing.
I've thought long and hard about this one and hope you don't mind my speaking what thoughts entered my mind.
I feel your walls are like the walls of Jericho.
Which makes me want to do 2 things. Either paint them white until ready to let them come tumbling down OR to tear it down and replace it with a blank canvas. Either of which can be used to paint pictures of what you want.
Canvas is more flexible and can be used as a curtain to be pulled around us when we need shelter but opened up to allow the light in.

Please feel free to remove this comment if it doesn't meet with your approval. I won't be offended. Lots of love and best wishes, Janet.xx

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Jeff Dawson

Sun 13th Jul 2008 15:18

Hi Melissa, this is so powerful and quite frightening in that you can sense the 'trapped' feeling. But you've added a sense of feeling that you're on the verge of freedom, and something special, I hope so, JeffX

ps The poem I've just added isn't a million miles from what you've written 'When will it pass?', hope you like it and thanks for your lovely comments the other day :-)

darren thomas

Sun 13th Jul 2008 10:05

Another powerful poem, Melissa. It seems that your poetry is now empowering you to take stock of your potential. Keep writing. It will only lead to better things - in every part of your life.

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clarissa mckone

Sun 13th Jul 2008 05:52

Hi Melissa, wonderful poem! The walls that bind us all, must come down at times, to let us explore life. I hope all is well with you. take care

<Deleted User> (4281)

Sat 12th Jul 2008 17:25

Dear Melissa

The poem has deep psychological base. It is written in a way that shows the walls holding you in. There are walls that keeping each of us that way, feeling somewhat imprisoned to our own body. Fabulous thought provoking imagination for the reader. One day those wall will come down…Smile.

GREAT POEM!

Thank you for your wonderful comment on my poem "A NOTE."

Warmest Regards,
Zuzanna

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