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Noises from above

Singing and clapping in her bed upstairs
My daughter, five, too excited for sleep
I think she's happy - I can hear the airs
From Mary Poppins, not counting of sheep
Hush! All is quiet now. Will slumber creep
Into her room to claim her soon? Surely
As darkness keeps falling from space so steep
Her shadowed face, her eyelids so heavy
Will slink like a black cat in jungle tree
Into the silence, into lofty lairs
Above the soil and grass, where night birds cheep
And gravity can't spoil, lovely and free
Necklaces strung with pearly moons, and stars
Sprinkled on cornflakes. Now it's safe to peep

◄ Between drinks

Learning to dance ►

Comments

<Deleted User> (4281)

Tue 15th Jul 2008 06:15

Hi, Antonio

This one is on a lighter side, well written poem of yours. I could picture you listening to these noises from upstairs...Then the silence so you could take a look if she finally sleeps.
Wonderful memory, she is going to read your poems at latter stage of life. It is like a beautiful portrait from her childhood. Nice write!

Thank you,
Zuzanna

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Jeff Dawson

Mon 14th Jul 2008 01:09

love these lines, will show my daughter, she's 8

Above the soil and grass, where night birds cheep
And gravity can't spoil, lovely and free
Necklaces strung with pearly moons, and stars
Sprinkled on cornflakes. Now it's safe to peep

great stuff enjoyed that and thanks for your comment, you're right about Curtis/Rodin never thpught of that n all this time I've liked Joy Division! cheers Jeff

<Deleted User> (5646)

Sun 13th Jul 2008 22:33

Necklaces strung with pearly moons and stars.
I like that line. It brings 2 completely different images to mind, 1 more recent than the other. Although for the life of me i can't explain the reason i said that.

Ah well, back to your sonnet. Dreamy idea of a child sleeping. Or wishing she was.
Very nice. Love Janet.xx

darren thomas

Sun 13th Jul 2008 18:44

'of' is, of course, 'on'. The joys of afternoon drunking! ! 8-P

darren thomas

Sun 13th Jul 2008 18:39

Speak for yourself. I nearly choked to death of a nugget of exotica!
I blame women.

darren thomas

Sun 13th Jul 2008 09:59

I enjoyed the imagery in this piece.

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