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lenka

 

If I ever hurt you,
It's important that you know,
I never ever meant to
and I will love you when I go

To touch your soft skin
to stroke your long dark hair
to smell again your sweet scent
I will remember everywhere

On the hill flying kites,
rolling in the warm wet grass
a summer long with sweet delights
that no other can surpass

once we were lovers warm and true
deep in the velvet bed
we made love and moved so gently in each other
then slept arm in arm and head to head

lenka

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Steven Dark

Fri 15th Jul 2011 23:46

Hi
@Val I take the point Val and see what you mean but for me the final verse is, well, the finality of lost love and the sweet memories that linger even many years later.

@Banksy Thanks for the comment and I understand perfectly what you mean. That's a rare thing and a memory to treasure, as I do too.

There is an anthology of my work now available to download for free at www.writersout.com/node/1836

Best to you both.

<Deleted User> (7212)

Fri 15th Jul 2011 23:06

love it - and I love the last verse also, but maybe because it's personal for me - I once had a girl - the only girl who I could go to sleep holding & we'd wake still in each other's arms - it was perfection. B

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Val Cook

Wed 13th Jul 2011 10:47

I enjoyed your poem but the last verse IMO doesn't quite work its good without it.

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