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Stars stuck

Pictures of old film stars stuck on the wall

Smoking their cigarettes, scooting in Rome

Clipped eyebrows, padded shoulders, men looked tall

But weren’t; perfected in old monochrome

Monroe holding Yves Montand disc at home

Kath Hepburn wearing the trousers, and proud

Tousle-haired Marlon and James Dean in bloom

Marlene leaner, Greta better. How’d

They look today, now smoking’s not allowed

Now dressing-up’s not done; no dress at all

That wavy hair’s a no-no, so’s a comb

They’d find a way to stand out from the crowd

They’d find a way to make themselves seem tall

Acting out roles in life’s visual poem

 

This was inspired by the pictures on my daughter's wall

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Andy N

Mon 25th Aug 2008 20:36

I still don't know how you keep doing these, tone as I always find writing sonnets a nightmare but this is good stuff as always!

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carol falaki

Mon 4th Aug 2008 20:43

Hi Antonioni,
Thanks for your comments on my blog entry 'Helpless'
I've tried one sonnet and it was not easy. perhaps I'll post it for your opinion. I enjoyed the image you created from the pictures on your daughter's wall. I liked the last line too.

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Sun 3rd Aug 2008 22:47

Hi Antonioni, for a minute there i thought you'd been to Madame Tussauds.
No offence to your daughter.
Great rhythm once again, good stuff. Keep 'em comin' as they say in the carry on movies.
Love Janet.xxx

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Jeff Dawson

Sun 3rd Aug 2008 17:29

Nice one Ant, I think they'd be struggling! Although I'm sure there'd ahve been something else, but maybe different people, who knows, cheers Jeff

darren thomas

Sun 3rd Aug 2008 15:50

Hi Ant...

Now, it's no secret that I enjoy this type off poetry. Work that begins to show the reader instead of telling them what they should be seeing in their mind's eye.
I think the concept of how these stars would appear today is fascinating, but is answered in someway by today's definition of 'celebrity'. Just about anybody who can convince the rest of us that they are famous for nothing more than not wanting to remain anonymous.
Those 'sonnets' appear to have a hold on you at the moment but I sense that you're beggining to shift in your style. This is good news. Experimentation spawns many things - not least, more inspiration.
The last line caused me to wrinkle the bridge of my nose with thought and imagination - 'life's visual poem' is a great phrase.

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