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I READ YOUR POEM

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I read your poem; it speaks to me

The words leak

humm to their own melodies.

 

 

I read your poem my heart skipped a beat

You knew how I felt

Then expressed it lyrically.

 

 

I read your poem and I opened my mind

It moved my soul

Line after line.

 

 

I read your poem it put a smile on my face

I wanna hear from you again

So I patiently wait.

 

 

I read your poem and I closed my eyes

I didn’t need to see the words

I was already hypnotised.

 

 

I read your poem the stanzas are alive

Its like music real heart felt music, that hasn’t been changed

Nor synthesized.

 

 

I read your poem words you wanted me to see

Words so meaning full

Meaning something different to you and to me.

◄ DING MY DONG !!!!

I LOVE YOU. I LOVE TO LOVE YOU ►

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Jeff Dawson

Tue 16th Sep 2008 14:56

Hi Gabby, I'm just catching up with stuff, really like this, lovely idea, simple (the way i like it!) and effective.

If I can say one thing though its the 2nd and 3rd lines in the 6th stanza, the former too long and the latter too short. Would it look and sound better if it said something like -

It's like music, heart felt music
unchanged or synthesized.

Only a thought, great stuff though Jeff X

<Deleted User> (5646)

Tue 9th Sep 2008 19:27

Hi Gabriella,
love the romantic image in this.
If it's true, you're a very lucky girl.
I can't recall anyone doing anything quite so romantic as writing a poem for me but it's on my wish list.

Love Janet.xx

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