I READ YOUR POEM
I read your poem; it speaks to me
The words leak
humm to their own melodies.
I read your poem my heart skipped a beat
You knew how I felt
Then expressed it lyrically.
I read your poem and I opened my mind
It moved my soul
Line after line.
I read your poem it put a smile on my face
I wanna hear from you again
So I patiently wait.
I read your poem and I closed my eyes
I didn’t need to see the words
I was already hypnotised.
I read your poem the stanzas are alive
Its like music real heart felt music, that hasn’t been changed
Nor synthesized.
I read your poem words you wanted me to see
Words so meaning full
Meaning something different to you and to me.
Jeff Dawson
Tue 16th Sep 2008 14:56
Hi Gabby, I'm just catching up with stuff, really like this, lovely idea, simple (the way i like it!) and effective.
If I can say one thing though its the 2nd and 3rd lines in the 6th stanza, the former too long and the latter too short. Would it look and sound better if it said something like -
It's like music, heart felt music
unchanged or synthesized.
Only a thought, great stuff though Jeff X