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Colin's Memory

I wrote this one about six years ago for my other half.  Believe it or not, a true story...

 

 

As Colin grew older his memory went,

Even if it was for money he’d lent.

He went to the doctor for some help,

More was needed than vitamins and kelp.

“Come back and see me,” the doctor said,

But after the very first night of going to bed,

Every last memory had flown from his head.

 

Two months later it finally came back.

He’d forgotten to go and visit the quack!

There he sat surrounded by doubt,

“I don’t believe it!” he began to shout.

“I forgot to go and see Doctor Brand,

How I forgot I don’t understand!”

 

“What was it for?” we put the question,

And he couldn’t pretend it was for indigestion.

“My bad memory,” he sheepishly admitted.

Someone should really get him committed!

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<Deleted User> (6895)

Mon 24th Oct 2011 22:55

he-cursedly-admitted?
he-pitifully-admitted?

or-

he read Stef Wildes pitiful poetry-
then cursed?
haha-thats more like it eh Lynn!

very glad indeed he is coping ok

love

2nutters.xx

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Lynn Dye

Mon 24th Oct 2011 21:34

Thank you Philipos, yes that is another idea I'm considering, thanks for the suggestion.
To be honest, we mostly just laughed this episode off - well, what else can you do? lol.x

Philipos

Mon 24th Oct 2011 17:23

Hi Lynn - how about 'shamefacedly' this would accurately portray how he might have felt without giving him the cause. This was a difficult subject well expressed.

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Lynn Dye

Mon 24th Oct 2011 09:39

Hi Stef & Tricia, thank you for your comment, and hey, I believe you are right - how about "sheepishly" instead?

Colin's fine thanks, though his memory still isn't great - the doctors couldn't find anything wrong anyway - so I guess that's the main thing.

Thanks again,
Love, Lynn'n'him xx

<Deleted User> (6895)

Sun 23rd Oct 2011 23:13

very moving poem Lynn-but!
(and with great respect)
lose the word 'shamefully'

not poor Colins fault
but I do get the sense of shame
he might mistakenly have felt
at the time.

how is he now?
might I ask.

certainly hope he overcomes the problem.

love

Stef&Trish.xx

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