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Time Spent Fishing

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Time Spent Fishing.

The time I spent fishing has often been happy, not usually sad sometimes indifferent, a pastime, though one not unfamiliar with the slow drawing out of hours into an endless vigil of watching waiting re-baiting, opening another beer, full concentration on a wholly futile exercise, subtle signs-put of rolling another, water licks my toes-breaking concentration, a slight resettling and rearrangement, lighter sparks, a resumption of emptiness-focused emptiness-emptiness, a deep plop brings me snapping back-ripples swarm outwards, sunshine in my eyes, a gull eager but put of by my presence hungrily covets the entrails of the bait fish, daily tourist cruise is returning its getting late-low throb in the distance breaks the natural still, the deep ebb and flow of the turning tide could be the sea breathing-an immense exhalation and inhalation-out-in-out-in-slowly, a seal a hundred yards away eyeing me warily perks my hopes, the sound of footsteps I turn around.

‘Is dinner ready, right I’d better pack then up won’t be a minute’.

‘Did you catch anything?’.

‘No’.

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<Deleted User> (5646)

Sun 5th Oct 2008 13:31

Hi there,
Over the last day or so, i've read this a few times. It reminds me of my dad too.
There's some great imagery and i particularly love the dreamy quality of a fisherman, waiting for that tug on the line.

For me, there's a few glitches in some of the way your story is told, but i do know how difficult it is to write poems and prose in the space provided. From experience, it doesn't always transfer the way we've written it.

Thanks for the memory. My dad used to love fishing. Stream, lake, river or sea. Didn't matter to him.
Ooh, you just gave me inspiration for a family poem. Thankyou.
love Janet.x

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Val Cook

Sat 4th Oct 2008 19:47

Enjoy reading about your fishing,takes me back
to when I accompanied my dad. "The deep plop brings me snapping back" great line. Dad used to often nod off too.

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