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Warhearts

 

Warhearts

A girl.

A guy.

Become one.

She works in the bar.

He drinks in the bar.

They leave in his car.

He drives.

She's his passenger.

Down dark roads they travel.

To where?

Not their normal route.

Venturing here or there.

Tits up from here.

Something went wrong.

His car left the road.

Down an embankment.

Upside down in the river.

No crash barrier?

Trapped in the car.

Assistance came.

Off duty rookie cop.

Rookie no more after this crash.

Cop couldn't get the girl out due to the car being inverted.

Tried to save the girl.

Unable to give her air.

Got her drunken boyfriend to do it.

Her pulse increased.

For a while.

A battle lost.

Would it have been easier if the car was upright?

Boyfriend loses it.

She can't die!

She does.

Choice made.

Drink and drive.

Crash and murder your girlfriend.

Just like that.

A life taken due to stupidity.

How many times did this happen and he got away with it?

Not this time.

Throw the book at him.

Karma will fuck him over.

Both man's and God's.

Lynette is dead.

lynette is killeddrunk driver boyfriendcar accidentrookie coplife stolen

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nick armbrister

Tue 15th May 2012 00:45

hi Harry, nah i dunno, depends on your POV. due to the strong topic matter, i think a couple of swear words are allowed. just my view. BUT...

Warhearts
A girl.

A guy.

Become one.

She works in the bar.

He drinks in the bar.

They leave in his car.

He drives.

She's his passenger.

Down dark roads they travel.

To where?

Not their normal route.

Venturing here or there.

Up in the air from here.

Something went wrong.

His car left the road.

Down an embankment.

Upside down in the river.

No crash barrier?

Trapped in the car.

Assistance came.

Off duty rookie cop.

Rookie no more after this crash.

Cop couldn't get the girl out due to the car being inverted.

Tried to save the girl.

Unable to give her air.

Got her drunken boyfriend to do it.

Her pulse increased.

For a while.

A battle lost.

Would it have been easier if the car was upright?

Boyfriend loses it.

She can't die!

She does.

Choice made.

Drink and drive.

Crash and murder your girlfriend.

Just like that.

A life taken due to stupidity.

How many times did this happen and he got away with it?

Not this time.

Throw the book at him.

Karma will screw him over.

Both man's and God's.

Lynette is dead.

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just for you, a sincere version with no swearing... thanx for reading, nick.

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Harry O'Neill

Mon 14th May 2012 21:37


Nick,

Effective memorial done in a `private eye` rat tat sort of narrative style...But - even so -the `tits up` and `fuck` don`t belong in this kind of poem...(they spoil the sincerity)

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nick armbrister

Mon 14th May 2012 19:03

in loving memory of Lynette Hammond, RIP my dear angel xxx

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