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Moments

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Sometimes there are moments,

Like this one in the car park

An afternoon of eternity

Seems fixed in the moving of a cloud

Over the rooflines of town;

Or in that plane that droned across the sky

The morning of Aunt Sadie’s funeral.

 

Why should they etch themselves

Acid-deep onto the retina of memory

When all those other days

Days we’d looked forward to,

Anticipated, long and eager,

Passed flat, anticlimactic, unremembered,

And finally unrecorded?

 

Is it because, I wonder,

What some might call God

(but only when pissed, or sad, or both)

Bids us to remember in this way only

Things it deems important;

Sunsets, or the movement of waves

Across the bay; these transitory clouds,

The sway of the branches all around;

 

Moments in eternal stasis

Leaves, alternate green and gold

In lux aeternam

Even though the trees themselves

Will die in time to compost?

 

A holy juxtaposition

Sears like a branding,

A momentary hiss of painful joy, then

Leaves white clouds, towering in summer sky:

I will remember this, although I don’t know why.

◄ La Vita Nuova

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Lynn Dye

Thu 9th Aug 2012 00:43

I enjoyed this very much, Steve. I think the mix of nature i.e. clouds, leaves, sunsets and waves etc. with memories like Aunt Sadie's funeral works really well.

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Harry O'Neill

Wed 8th Aug 2012 23:08


Steve,
I was reading this as a sort of `tempted by eternity` piece (I think it was the picture) and expecting a sort of wistful and wishful airy nostalgia. But your:

`Why should they etch themselves
Acid-deep in the retina of memory`?

and:
`Sears like a branding`
And
`hiss of painful joy`

Don`t chime in with such a reading.

Your `God` ( only thought about when `pissed or sad`, and then reduced to an `it`) is a modern enough way of talking about a deity. And – momentarily – made me think you were treating Nature`s sacral a bit like Larkin`s `Church Going` treated the the architectural sacral…But the above quotes are not in the same kind of mocking kilter.

It`s a lot more self-aware than those last five words will let you get away with.

`Moments in eternal stasis` and `Leaves white clouds towering in a summer sky` are memorable lines.

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