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Song of the dark 2

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Hooray! It’s nearly time to celebrate

The passing of the darkest day of all

You don’t need to spend wildly to feel great

Or pass out through imbibing alcohol

No, why not simply sit back, meditate

On how once again we survived the fall

And now our frozen fingers push the gate

Into the garden sheltered from the squall

Expecting sunlit lawns and time to wait

Joy frozen like a statue in the hall

Surreal escapism a rising trait

As light and heat fades like a parent’s call

Clinging to children, hoping they’ll placate

These chill winds, their bright cheeks smooth as a ball

◄ Snow joke

Guitar love story ►

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Pete Crompton

Thu 18th Dec 2008 00:56

I like this one An.
I also love all your travel pics, im hoping they are all pinned upon a board somewhere in case you blackout from poetic overload.

Liking all your travelogues

'expecting sunlit lawns and time to wait'

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Chris Dawson

Wed 17th Dec 2008 22:55

Really liked this. Did you intend the double meaning of 'survived the fall'? We tend to think of fall as an American term for autumn, but actually it was in use in England in Shakespeare's day & was more usual than autumn.
Thanks for your comments about mine too, I feel I'm making progress - emotionally if not poetically!
Cx

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Wed 17th Dec 2008 21:52

Aw Antonionioni,
this is a very touching poem for this time of year.

And now our frozen fingers push the gate
into the garden sheltered from the squall.

Beautiful lines, although i do love them all.
Sad aren't I?
'scuse me, this caught me unawares.
Love Janet.x

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