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Trace Back

I felt like I was living
in yesterday
with the past burning so brightly,
so clearly before me,
and all the walls of today
fall down.
And I remember then
as I often do,
and regret tears
at my heart.
And then yesterday fades,
and here I stand with tomorrow
holding my hand.
I have come a long way,
and time is my witness.
There are days
when I wish to turn the clock back,
change what I did wrong,
and live another life,
but I must live this one.
This is my life,
and even with the visits of the past,
nothing would ever change the history
that I have left behind.
This is me living in today,
and the walls fall down.

Trace Back
by, Melissa R. Mendelson

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Jeff Dawson

Thu 5th Feb 2009 20:51

Hi Melissa, once again I can identify with your sentiments and that acceptance seems to be nearing, come a long way, you bet!

Great stuff, take care Jeff X

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Sun 28th Dec 2008 11:54

Yet another lovely piece of poetry in a flowing stream of emotion from you Melissa.
Although i can see where Andy's coming from in his comment. I feel it would give it more power if you break it up into stanza form.
A bit like adding a rhythmical beat to the lovely trill which is running through your river right now.

Love and light, Janet.x

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Chris Dawson

Sat 27th Dec 2008 08:12

Very good - I really identified with this. From your poetry and your comments on mine, I would suspect we're both emerging from the same painful place?!!
Cx

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clarissa mckone

Sat 27th Dec 2008 02:50

HI Melissa, this is wonderful. You know the walls come down, and go up, and come down.Regrets are what people that are alive have.If only we could turn the clock back, and change some things, but then what other things may change?Would we like it? I hope you had a nice christmas, and that you are doing ok. I enjoyed the poem very much. Remember, we all have a past and we learnd from it, we all have a future and thats wonderful!

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Andy N

Fri 26th Dec 2008 11:24

I think this is lovely, although if I am honest I would consider splitting it up into stanzas as I think a little pause here and there will improve it no end! Like I said, i really like it thou!

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