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Beneath The Watch Tower

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Beneath The Watch Tower

 

I watch the man who sits below the oak,

his features twisted by the scars of time,

a body wrapped inside a velvet cloak

of moss, that wasn’t there back in his prime.

 

He played amid the gnawing granite teeth

that sprung from grassy gums of evergreen

and knew nothing of those who lay beneath,

but only those who, with him, danced between.

 

Then one-by-one the dancers went to bed

and left the man alone with only dreams -

or fears that simple dreams might raise the dead.

Pray tell who, in this place, would hear him scream?

 

Dead flowers hang from vases, cracked and dull,

their pretty bonnets overgrown with weeds -

whose simple aspirations tug and pull

to satisfy their parasitic needs.

 

I stand so tall and proud with stony face,

a voice left silent since the chimes of war.

I want him to be happy in this place -

not sad and bitter for what went before.

 

As twilight hides beneath a heavy cowl

of darkness, rising bleak above my spire,

the hooting of a solitary owl

snaps consciousness as taut as any wire.

 

With a world, weary sigh he stands to leave –

turning, but once, to look upon my face.

I know that with that glance he still believes

that I am God and he the Human Race.

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David Blake

Sat 23rd Feb 2013 17:27

Excellent effort again Ian. The final stanza, as you'd expect, made me re-read and re-assess the piece. Just one of those poems that rewards with each reading. Keep up the good work!

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Andy N

Wed 20th Feb 2013 08:08

good structure here, John is dead right with this. Clearly a skill here at work with this piece. good stuff, m8

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John Coopey

Tue 19th Feb 2013 20:38

Whoa, Ian!
This made an impact on first reading through its imagery and iambic pentameter.
But it made an even bigger impact second time round as I anticipated the ending and the images dropped into a better understood context.
I suspect you know what you are doing.
I think you will like the work of Ian Gant and Thomas Thurman on this site.
Keep posting

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