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Days

 

 

 

Days

 

 

In the morning she was mother again,

breakfasting gaily on the remaining quarter bottle,

whilst you trekked to ‘the shop’

like a disgruntled wine waiter sent to distant cellars.

Don’t desert me held you hostage in the kitchen,

listening, as she worried at the past, for the first slouched words

that made you want to slap her.

By early afternoon she swayed to the drink’s rhythm,

fancying a bowl of instant mash with marmite

that knocked her out like a boxer’s punch.

‘The lodger’ took the second watch.

As she tallied each empty with a triumphant

That’s another one he observed her with

gothic intentions over cigarettes and tea,

until in the early hours there were oaths and blows.

Rescue arrived in the dark miracle of a lump.

Dismissing medical interference in her body’s plans,

your mother resolutely accepted the exit cancer offered.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Noetic-fret!

Sat 27th Apr 2013 21:12

You write well Fiona, I would even suggest perhaps in the not too distant future you venture a publisher to look at some of your work. It is certainly better than some who are in the shops.

This piece leaves me wanting to read more.

Thank you

Mike

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fiona sinclair

Sat 27th Apr 2013 13:55

Thank you i will take your comments on board. you are all very kind. More poems to come as i have a mammoth task of rewriting

Fiona

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 27th Apr 2013 11:27

Ms Sinclair, you have power in your way with words, and your sly twists, equally. I find your choices of diction and arrangement suit me well, as I follow the lead of structured rhythm and assonance. If this is the result of instantaneous writing, I'm almost ready to lay down my own quill! The title 'Days' is brutal.

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Laura Taylor

Thu 25th Apr 2013 12:48

Ah - been there, but only the drink part, not the cancer.

A survivor's story. Thanks for sharing.

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