The biggest crime
Council plans finally been passed,
time for renovation in city park,
along with the hired professionals
several young men work unpaid
fulfilling community sentences.
Three lads in their early twenties,
at the end of a long, hard day
leaving the grounds, fall into line
start talking along their way.
The first is serving two hundred hours
for his first offence of burglary,
the second, a hundred and ten hours
for irresponsible drink driving.
The third is serving six months.
“What, no way!” says the first,
“judge can’t give you that much,
maximum's three hundred hours!”
“Wow, man!” says the second.
“What the hell was your crime?”
“My crime,” says the third,
feeling somewhat annoyed.
“I’ll tell you my crime.
I was unemployed.”
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Mon 21st Oct 2013 13:08
Hi, Lynne. Good poem, as always. Love your posts.
As I was reading I just kept leaving out all kinds of unnecessary words. Have a finger-flicking good time and toss out several - IMO, they interrupt rhythm and your driving intent.