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Moving On

Breathe in -- aspire
breathe out -- expire
my aspirations knows no expiration.

With each sunset  
there be -- sunrise awaits
and therein lies my expiation.

Here in a downy refuge lay,
this germinant resolve:
what I was  I no longer am.

 


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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 16th Dec 2013 13:14

Good theme - very universal. Always good to see you posting.

IMO, I suggest two changes - for rhythm and verb tense respectively:

With each sunset
sunrise waits'

and

here in downy refuge lies

(unless you are using 'lay' as 'song' which doesn't quite work either.)

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