Twilbury Wist

The poetry of people

by Twilbury Wist

Sunday 13th April 2014 1:36 pm

Sometimes

I wonder

About the poetry

Of people

And of life

All of you

And me

With our

Dance

Our rhythm

Our search for

The soul

And yet

Sometimes

It all seems

So alien to me

Animals dancing

To a hidden

Beat

Which even

They can't feel

Most of the time

Yet still it

Goes on

Inner music

Inner movement

Forcing the clockwork

To tick

And to change

And isn't that

Just the most beautiful

Thing

Aside of

Everything

Else

And all this

From me

With my mind full

Of a cacophony

Of evil

◄ Blinded

A tribute to Chinaski ►

Comments

Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 15th May 2014 13:25

To be honest, not quite. I challenge the premise that you, the writer, are inherently 'evil', revealing the 'true nature of the beast'. It sounds sort of soppy, or 'sophisticated'.

You should look up the origin of 'sophisticated' and 'sophomore'. When I first did so, I laughed for days; it was so appropriate, and I had so completely misunderstood it before. It sure cut me down to size.

BTW, I like your work.

Anthony

Thu 15th May 2014 10:36

I like to drop bombs at the end
Although I do like the resonance of the words it is the significance of the statement that is important. It is intended to form a harsh contrast with the rest of the poem - almost as though the narrator draws the reader in, offering a softness and a calm only to end with the true nature of the beast as it were.
I think the suggestion is that if something so evil can think like and see like that, it shouldn't be so difficult for everyone else. see?

Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 8th May 2014 09:56

Sounds a bit more like puppetry to me, predestination and all that ilk. Yet your view is obviously considered, and well-made. At what point did you decide you have a 'mind full of a cacophony of evil'? That''s a very strong pronouncement, full of inference, dropping like a bomb at the end. I actually wondered if you liked the resonance of the words over the significance of the statement.

I am not criticizing, just interested; I like your thought processes.

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