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Words repeating themselves


I knew what I was doing
All the way out of the door
Until I tasted the moonlight
And felt the snow 
Dripping off my shoulders

Picking my way through
The empty seats
And the sea filtered breath
Of the older couple
Sat at the back of us

Curved in reckless abandon
As first the attendees
Tried to stop me
Then both of the security
In unaided shock

As first my throat
Then my stomach
Let out a sigh of release
In the gold glow
Of freedom

Scoring a bull’s eye
At the merging of the car park
Then the burger king

Ballerina tight
Suspended inbetween
The swollen screen
And into the moonlight

Dreaming of words
Repeating themselves. 

◄ Imaginary letter to older self

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Andy N

Tue 27th May 2014 12:06

cynthia's right here gray. more than a few layers in this. it's one that needs thought to re-read.

excellent.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 8th May 2014 12:04

The more I read this, the better it gets; it is definitely not a one-off scan. I think this is well-constructed, tight, with superb imagery like 'the sea filtered breath of the older couple', 'ballerina tight' and 'swollen screen'. Also, I think the lines are carefully organized. The ending is esoteric, a conclusion that embraces the title and spreads a web of possible meanings.

I really like this poem.

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