In the Temples of the Elders
White strobe
beams descending;
mites of dust – millions –
spiral down, forever falling.
A head bent forward, bright eyes
peruse a wall of text.
Artefacts surround,
wood, bronze, iron;
examined, gazed upon, a story
of evolution grasped and clung to.
Mirrored walls and stone faces
stare blind at this visitor,
just another intruder.
The encoded scriptures
in heaped sheets of
paper, thin as Bible leaf,
give little away;
painting one message;
that which locks all light,
draws a sunset to its close;
no truth to be found
in yesterday’s
caged, fragmented dark.
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Sat 24th May 2014 16:21
Good poem - but are you sure of your conclusion?
The metaphor 'thin as Bible leaf' is very good. I knew exactly what you meant,even though disagreeing that all Bibles are thin-leafed. These days most are.
Consider: 'dust mites - millions' because it echoes the four-beat line prededing it, and doesn't trip over 'of' which, IMO, is often a 'trap' word in poetry. Just a thought.