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UNTITLED..Part 6

Is it pre-determined, for me to, feel the hurting, and feed the burning, im yearning, turning corners of learning, curving round the barriers of knowledge, to heed, lessons are lurking, everyday another peice in the jigsaw, ignorance is deafening my ears like a ripsaw, whats it all for?, seeking meaning in every step, breathing.....Seeking truth, in every breath, trying to salvage whats left of the wreck, to break the chains and murder that which pillages my head, uncertanty, whos feeling it worse than me? I dont seek comfort in other peoples tragedys, let me be, set me free, or watch me D...I...E, try to steal my thoughts and watch me turn slightly, seeking peace, but finding war, even deep within myself, we must start at home, before, we change somewhere else....

◄ WHAT AM I TO DO?

TODAY IS BLESSED... ►

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Noetic-fret!

Fri 17th Apr 2009 07:20

lol at Nabila as Mrs Hitler comment below. Nice work yosh man. Keep em coming!

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clarissa mckone

Fri 17th Apr 2009 03:01

The ripsaws great!

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Steve Regan

Thu 16th Apr 2009 13:06

I also liked the line "ignorance is deafening my ears like a ripsaw", and truth-seeking, which you also refer to, is a great motivator of poetry. This has a good rap rhythm to it. Your stuff is heartfelt, Yosh, and it has passion. Keep writing, Best...

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Thu 16th Apr 2009 11:19

love the line 'corners of learning' and ignorance is deafening my ears like a ripsaw

thanks for reading and taking time to comment bs. that poem has taken me 4 months to write and hey i don't look at people's spelling mistakes lol - i do that in the classroom : ) (and I am not the Mrs Hitler I seem)

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