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Empty

 

 Inhaled black smoke
 slithering around inside
 slowly taking control
 control of who I am
 fighting an never ending battle
 slowly losing and accepting of what is to come
 wrapping myself in this darkness
 until sadness is nothing new to me
 anger I let in and settle
 happiness comes but I push away
 the darkness has clouded my judgement
 slowly welcoming it
 fore it makes me numb
 no more fighting no more tears
 no emotions
 I have finally accepted my fate
 Emptiness is who I am.

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Graham Sherwood

Mon 3rd Nov 2014 09:48

This piece outlines what resignation feels like really emphatically.
"Anger I let in and settle" is very good words.

well done

Graham

<Deleted User> (6895)

Sun 2nd Nov 2014 22:12

Warm welcome from us too Melissa-You are off to a great start!Keep it up!

Thanks.Patricia and Stef.xx

melissa

Sun 2nd Nov 2014 12:38

Thank you that does sound a lot better...
I like how I can express myself in deep thought but never in a creative way..

<Deleted User> (9882)

Sun 2nd Nov 2014 11:30

Hi there Melissa,and a warm welcome to you.

Great poem.Would you mind if I offered my version of it,respectfully of course?

Enforced blackness
swirls within
controlling
defeating the ability
to overcome
and rescue myself
from its tenebrous invasion.

Sadness
is an old unwanted companion
settled,
hand in hand with anger
both clouding my judgement
with such ease
that to deter
the waste of anymore tears
any more futile emotions
I succumb to
and accept the wearing of
cloaking emptiness.
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Best regards to you.Hope you enjoy your time on Write out loud.x

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