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Liberation

 

Liberation





Everything controversial, wins upon it's ethics,

though nothing worth its effort is ever easy in its name,

Liberating lands of foe is more than politics,

it's a backward glance at darkest hours, where

regimes cripple civil rights.



Kabul under siege,

Human beings tied to coffins

fight amongst themselves to leave,

and kidnappings of futures

set concrete to its grief,

believe the western hemisphere,

the road to cemeteries in Kandahar

is brief.



A Troopers life,- a sacrifice,

A reason run by sordid deaths;

A fly by of a fight against a

Taliban with rape

upon its wives, and lives of

children, hungered, kept

dark of scribes slip

silently their knives,

deep inside the Burkha,

a garment like tradition

of religious faith,

insulted, stained -

matted by a

hate.



A corpse if you will?

Bring them back and sit

them still, but be complicit

on a darkened hour and aid

a gawky kill! Spill sublime

ferocity and forget a fellow

nation, a nation plagued by

serpents skill for a womb

they disrespect.



The sister, mother, daughter you

adore, be nothing more than whores,

if sitting there you state within the

comfort of your chair; 'bring em back,

and let Afghanistan rot itself on

poppy fields and crack.'




Michael J Waite 1st May 2009 2222hrs.

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Chris Dawson

Mon 4th May 2009 09:56

Not usually a great fan of special effects, but it sort of works on this one - sort of like those diembodied, tannoy voices you can imagine coming from armoured vehicles warning you to stay in your home, or some such. The only thing with special effects, I think you have to be a little more precise with your diction to counteract the distorting effect, and I'm not sure your recording levels are set absolutely right for you.
On a performance note - beware starting the first 'note' of your sentence higher and letting your voice trail away to the end of the sentence - we all do it, but it does tend to lose words like that and give a slightly 'worthy' tone to your performance - better to let the words speak for themselves, particularly with such an emotive piece as this.
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Noetic-fret!

Mon 4th May 2009 01:37

I could fine tune it, but before i do any fine tuning, just wanted to run this by you with some vocals with effects, see what you think. Im open : )

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