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UP FOM LONDON.

Easter brings you; Christmas too,
to see your family and your friends.
Among the latter I’m the first
to miss you when your visit ends.
We meet, and eat and drink in pubs
where I consume what I can’t keep;
I hunger as your beauty
grows unfathomably deep.
I would lean in and kiss you
but I fear you might resist,
although I have a feeling
there were moments when
we might have kissed.

 

We might have kissed
and crowned our friendship;
wreathed it with withheld desire,
knowing all the while the risk
of banking such a fatal fire;
knowing too how distance doubles
yearning; or can drive a wedge
between the best intentions
of a tender parting pledge. But,
if you felt inclined to kiss me
be assured I’d not resist:
life is short and no one dies
regretting being kissed.

◄ THE FINAL OVER.

A PENNY / LOST IN THOUGHT / THINK ON ►

Comments

Travis Brow

Mon 20th Apr 2015 10:42

You're very kind Cynthia, thank you. I'm going to London in June to visit the person i'm addressing in the poem - wish me luck.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sun 19th Apr 2015 15:57

Tenderness - and hesitancy - with fine rhyming. What's not to like! Plus 'I hunger as your beauty grows unfathomably deep' is a line to set the gifted above the humdrum. I weep - well - not really - but the thought is there.

Travis Brow

Wed 15th Apr 2015 06:42

Thank you Harry. Your description of the poem's ''delicate hesitancy'' is bang on. That's exactly the feeling the poem grew from.

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Harry O'Neill

Tue 14th Apr 2015 14:55

Travis,
I agree completely with John`s comments on this.

I tried re-doing it in longer lines and couplets but it lost completely, the delicate hesitancy you have managed.

I like the sense of danger in that `banking`

There is an overall wistfulness about it which makes it feel like a letter that was written - but never sent.

Enjoyed very much.

Travis Brow

Tue 14th Apr 2015 14:42

Thanks very much John.

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John Coopey

Sun 12th Apr 2015 00:03

"unfathomably deep" - brilliant, Travis. Perfect combination of mystique, meaning, rhythm and rhyme.

Travis Brow

Sat 11th Apr 2015 12:11

Thank you Lea; one from the heart.

Lan

Sat 11th Apr 2015 02:43

I really enjoyed this one too Travis, thanks :)

Travis Brow

Thu 9th Apr 2015 06:41

Thank you Lynn.

Lynn Hamilton

Wed 8th Apr 2015 11:00

Really enjoyed reading - lovely

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