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Tiny Tim 0716

In life
PADDLED ONWARD THROUGH THIS STRIFE,
KNOCKED BY BRANCHES,
SLICED UP BY SKIPPED ROCKS,
SUNKEN BY A CENTURY OF MOLLUSKS
JUST INCHES BEFORE I REACH THE DOCKS

Grown men, groan, men:
Provisions for the visionary,
Incisions for the wild and weary,
We re caught up in this soylent fishnet panic,
gasps draw mouths araw:

WE RE MADE OUT OF FUCKING PEOPLE!

SO LIFTED TO THE ATOMIC,
REVISIONED LIGHT EVERY SECOND IS DAWN
AND EVERY FLOWER IS A GUN DRAWN
TO A PAIR OF FLOATING BABYS BREATH EYES,
reborn anew.

When a perfect stranger lifts you to their level In this world
Whos supporting who?

baby's breath long draw slow draw

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Removed the Silver Ring (04/12/2015) ►

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Jackie Phillips

Fri 10th Apr 2015 08:35

Hi Zach - Of the poems of yours that I have read so far, this I think is my favourite one yet. Your poetry seems to me, to be multifaceted and when I read it I find different meanings within it every time. It is sort of disjointed and yet flowing.

There are so many lines in this poem that I like but I think the one I like best is, 'WE RE MADE OUT OF FUCKING PEOPLE!' which of course is true in every respect.

Keep writing !!!

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