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Learning to live, without loving you

You confessed your love for me so soon
Brought light into my dark seedy life 
You had my heart, as the stars have the moon 
But you've ripped it apart like paper to a knife 

I cannot continue this path much longer 
For my efforts are always dismissed 
I'm weakening where you are stronger 
I've been at my knees since we kissed 

I beg of you to loosen your grip 
Let me go and tend to my wounds 
Your distant hand cut like a whip 

And now there is nothing more I can do 
My heart has expended it's last beat
I must learn to live, without loving you 

LoveromanticismIf? hopeless feelings down depression

Learning to live, without loving you ►

Comments

Mike Ligorio

Tue 28th Apr 2015 13:51

Thank you for your comments. They are much appreciated. Graham, I understand completely. I did get quite lazy towards the end. Poetry is something i just enjoy and use as an outlet, so i appreciate any constructive criticism which may benefit my writings in the future.

Nat, thank you for your comment and for sharing that poem. I really enjoyed reading it.

I will be sure to check out both of your works too.

x

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Graham Sherwood

Fri 24th Apr 2015 21:04

I liked this Mike but I feel a little short-changed in the last two verses (only three lines each). The four liners scan much better. A gentle, if heartfelt piece.
Good work!

Graham

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