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Fishing

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Fishing in the sea

of old skeletons, flesh eaten

hollowed out, sunken eyes

will get you nothing.

Old sea dogs like you,

need a quaff of a hearty young

drink, vigor refound.

Life in the nether regions restored.

The waters are fresh here.

Dip your hand in, trail a toe.

Try me.

I may bite.

◄ Trading places

The Mediocrity Curse ►

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Corr Lens

Sat 23rd May 2015 12:33

I love your rhythm. Narcissistically, cause it's like mine ;)

Lan

Sat 9th May 2015 08:31

Love the ending, Preeti, really good xx

Lynn Hamilton

Thu 7th May 2015 13:24

Lovely, Preeti. x

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Andy N

Thu 7th May 2015 12:55

last line really works Preeti.

gives it a very different meaning.

works well for me that.

excellent

Preeti Sinha

Wed 6th May 2015 16:04

Graham, thank you. Made the change. I was not too sure !
Thank you again.....

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 6th May 2015 14:33

This is really impressive Preeti, I like it a lot. It's brevity but straightforward phrasing. I don't like the last line, make it one thing or the other.
Great work.

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