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You inoculated me, so I was immune to your love

Gave me just a taste then dried me up
Time and space coagulates in place 
Congealing and sealing everything you took away 
No more conscious volition I enter submission
Just outside my peripheral vision 
The sound of your hand saying goodbye is a wavelength 
I no longer hold flowers, I am just an empty vase  
And the music in my head is the sound of rain
I hear all the notes as they pour over my membrane 
The most harrowing orchestra that will ever play 
A mere hologram of what used to hold weight 
I disinfect my intellect so I can no longer recollect 
An infliction prescription you wrote for my addiction
And the echo of this humming drum is what I run from 
Trying to escape the loud pounding rhythm 
But your touch left an impression on my reflection
When I look in a mirror I can see all your confessions 
Painted with colors so tainted and tasteless
Who knew we were encrypted with something so scripted 
And the silence of your absence was a quiet guidance 
Of how you told me my feelings for you were benign 
But when I kissed you it impaled me with your lie
And it was on your bed in that hotel that I was crucified 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

◄ What Is Love

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Chloe Marina

Fri 29th May 2015 19:14

Aww thank you Cynthia! I want to say I deeply appreciate your commenting so thank you so much :). Yes it was a little wordy I was mostly just playing around with sounds and rhymes. I think it sounds better read out loud but I agree it isn't my best work, there's always things to improve.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 29th May 2015 11:15

Chloe (my grandmother's name, and I love it), this piece is interesting - but it sure has a lot of varied metaphors. Would you consider one or two only? Sometimes brevity to express a strong idea is very effective.

Or was this effusion of comparison deliberate?

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