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You inoculated me, so I was immune to your love
You inoculated me, so I was immune to your love
Chloe (my grandmother's name, and I love it), this piece is interesting - but it sure has a lot of varied metaphors. Would you consider one or two only? Sometimes brevity to express a strong idea is very effective.
Or was this effusion of comparison deliberate?
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Chloe Marina
Fri 29th May 2015 19:14
Aww thank you Cynthia! I want to say I deeply appreciate your commenting so thank you so much :). Yes it was a little wordy I was mostly just playing around with sounds and rhymes. I think it sounds better read out loud but I agree it isn't my best work, there's always things to improve.