yellow
summer is the dead time
all winter - when dripping rain
within the bounds of a pulled in coat
- I have dreamed of this
but now it comes
and like birthdays
it does not satisfy
the flowers lack the brightness of spring
and the long evenings
- well they just lack
and can't compare -
to the darkness of winter teatimes
but give it a month
and the august heat
give it the happy time of september
give it the frozen winter rain
- and the coat wrapped round -
for summer is the dead time
jeremy young
Wed 22nd Jul 2015 19:59
so am I
it is an issue of the style I am exploring - finding a way to free the language and at the same time drawing on it's etymological basis
and trying establish a grammatical format - through spacing word choice and the natural rhythms of speech - that is not immediately experimental - or unnecessarily surreal
hence my reference to the implied end-stopped enjamb - as one of the principle areas I have been working on is the notion of lines being statements/slogans
my apologies if my reply appeared flippant - was was not intended that way