a quiet revolt
the hush fell absolute
mid-flow he had been tripped
she sipped the half drunk wine
and we all watched for response
come on she said answer me
and he laughed in that way
that non-smokers cough - phlegmatic -
dismissive and surprised
so she sipped the wine once more
- privately we clapped -
then she in good grace excused herself
and moved to another table
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Fri 24th Jul 2015 10:44
Fabulous. A scene encapsulating a whole relationship, a whole 'type' of relationship - like a butterfly on a pin.
Your ideas, the vocabulary to support them, and the line development to express them are enviable.