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ode to the thought sniper

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ode to the thought sniper

crusTranquilizer
birtHabits
gonzOblivion
haikUnhuman
stinGabba
moutHumiliation
fighTelepathic

ruinSecluded
arsoNeurons
zombIngenious
clasPensive
slidEnding
alteReflections


[ copyright owen calvert 2009 ]

◄ randomidnightreflections iii

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owen calvert

Wed 17th Jun 2009 23:06

cheers guys, appreciate the honesty with these comments - personally i am not a fan of explaining the meaning behind my own work, but i will try - the true reality behind this poem is unclear and perhaps ambiguous, but disjointed words and a seemingly distant or non-existent relation between the words are at the core of how the thought sniper works. trains of thought are derailed and the ability to express is stolen.

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Tue 16th Jun 2009 10:18

Hi Owen,
interesting concept but like Winston i wonder if the word pairs could be better applied.
Maybe there are lengthy words which have the ''message thread'' running through like a vein of truth perhaps. Hm.. Not sure i want to go there but you got me thinking.

Janet. :-)

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winston plowes

Mon 15th Jun 2009 22:47

Ingenious idea, wonder if more cohesion between the word pairs or lines can be made. Winston.

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